Why you want to go there ?huh ………………what you thought just cause a spic did some emotional shit id forget what I do? Nigga I aint JA RULE or none of them….i aint got a pay check to swet so I can say what the fuck I want….

How aboute …..
Im one of the best to bless-your brains cells in acapells.
Leave a flaming mess with your loss addressed-
postage due in hell.(you owe me your soul)

you aint the gambling battling type-
I engage in war the stakes are the price of you life-
I leave mics with…..scorching~with flammable~ shit-
so how you gonna spit a dime when you less FORTUNE~it?
I’ll rip you in 2 punchlines….
leaven nothing left after I write(right) them perpetual-
you a brainiac but not intellectua intellectual….
you rap dickriders crap...you sucks 2 ways…. like bisexuals.
The punchline brawler-the scholastic scholar-
My ten dimes gets me platinum yours gets you a dollar.
I should frame my diary loose leafs of the last beaf-
So the next kid that talk shit could picture the defeat.
NONCENTZ in this for dolo….
Unleash my ghostwriter as a poltergeist released on my first solo-
While your ghostwriters lyrics oddly embody the spirit of a homo.
You wouldn’t be ill if you were diagnosed with abollo.
Oh you an iller m.c.? prove it to me-
Put a thermometer to your larenex …
and spit some text to measure the degree.
You aint a rapper you a fan-
matter of fact a fans fan… a new version STAN.

So Take this loss…
or battle the BULLET CLAPPED and get a ROUND of APPLAUSE.
I cock block brains and make your ideas menapause.
Just cause you drop a 12” don’t mean you can drop twelve-
That aint a cd that’s an orniment for the shelve.
Another lame mime trying to rhyme-
your shit leaves me speechless so ill say fuck you in sign.
.............................................Get off mine.................................
your girl giving me brains is the only way you’ll be on my mind.
Other then that-I massacaring anything I find wack-
then wack off behind it and call it my cum back.
anybody who want get on my nerves willget thiers hurt-
Cause dissing me is a woarse decision then THE ROC signing
DIRT MCGIRT.

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OOOOohhhh! Damn, that was some hot shit, not like the other stuff a yours i read. Thats more like it dog!i WISH i KNEW WHO U DISSIN....Lotsa dope word play and multies, potent punches, you chain smokin' 'em bro! Noice form.

"your shit leaves me speechless so ill say fuck you in sign."

^^^that line stood out the most to me...shit was dope...flow was on point...and vocab was nice like usual...if ya used punchez like ya had in here in ya battlez then maybe you'd win sometimez...lol...didn't really have any multi'z but ya flow compenstated for it...damn...that boy WORD...alwayz tryin' to compensate for somethin'...lol...

This shit is pretty tght..i aint likin your structure...if i was high i would not b able to read that shit kinda all over the place...you got some tight ass lines in ther tho..feelin the start some killa shit

I leave mics with…..scorching~with flammable~ shit-
so how you gonna spit a dime when you less FORTUNE~it?

^^ feelin tht

ya need ta sort out ya structure tho cus fo me made it real hard to read n ya flow was a lil fucked..

You aint a rapper you a fan-
matter of fact a fans fan… a new version STAN.

^wack

this verse was so/so you had it all killa lines n wackness

overl tho ya deserve props cus it was still tight

Keep Droppin

that line was a setup for the next pop but thanks for the critique

uppin

good shit, flow was good, tyou came hard in this, i liked your cum back line that was funny, but it was all there but ye metas weird thoug normally u got like fuckin shit load lol...but good drop 8/10...peace

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THANK YOU THOUGH YOU COMMENT WAS HARD TO UNDERSTAND LOL

yo man thas some tight shit, some real nice vocab in this piece and ya flow was down pact, had some tight wordplay, could use some more multi's, but I'd have to say everything else was pretty much on point and also u had some pretty tight lines.

Oh you an iller m.c.? prove it to me-
Put a thermometer to your larenex …
and spit some text to measure the degree.

^^was feelin that fo sho man.

props to ya bro keep droppin.

if ya got the time check out my piece "Bloodied Dreams (sleepless nights)" and leave me some feed. thanx in advance man. peace.

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