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10-22-03, 08:31 PM
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IP:
constellations and galaxies crusted with a billion stars
inter-stellar parts in a vacuum of unexplored charts aliens on mars...fuck that were aliens on this earthen sphere of fervent fear detached from our roots by socialists' spear leading hopeless careers while our environment implodes silently corrodes with an acid to rust foundations post encroached by the merry mens ropes who overule power were puppets on strings shower claustophobes to hours a shrinking significance devoured by a backhand incentive toothless villains shun dentists they speak riddles by rhetorics how can we settle this? thats a trillion dollar question priceless even conquested by humanities viced pressure the world is filled by lessers but governed by moneys corruption leaders lacking gumption except the few like Mandelas muster grounded by gravities suction at one with the people sorry but religion hasnt solved a thing...faith in a steeple? conceitful idioms a heaven sent mirage wont save future cracks and wrinkles in mother earths face need sense's suture |
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10-23-03, 08:35 AM
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This was an enjoyable piece
Vocab ..was tight.. constellations and galaxies crusted with a billion stars inter-stellar parts in a vacuum of unexplored charts aliens on mars...fuck that were aliens on this earthen sphere of fervent fear detached from our roots by socialists' spear Real nice opener... Good , concept with some nice, ..things to think about, .. well explained, thru a nice immagery..and a flow that was ok on point... This was a good read..nice job... Peace..
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10-23-03, 09:17 AM
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IP:
This piece was tight... good topic... ill vocab...
'constellations and galaxies crusted with a billion stars inter-stellar parts in a vacuum of unexplored charts' was your best verse... great opening line... got me interested... |
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10-23-03, 09:26 AM
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IP:
Thought this was mad deep,most lines had two,three meanings and it wasn't about space it was abot our world and life,was feelin tha vocab,wordplay,inter bars were there nad it flowed.good concept and thus it was really quite good.
Peace |
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10-23-03, 12:10 PM
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IP:
upper
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10-23-03, 12:45 PM
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IP:
wow, nice drop
the best thing bout yer verse is the nice use of vocab, it was a good drop 1 |
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