My existence contains insufficient information
Drug's infiltrating the basis of my minds creation
Im the unicorn trapped in my universe
Four wall's govern the hordes of my downfall
Sitting here, soaking up purple haze, a drug sponge
I got lumps in my lungs, Im buzzing circle daze for months
Exchanged my fridge for blunts, I aint sitting on seats
Although I wish for TV so I can keep my imagination inspired
To ring the doorbell, attach together both wires
Come alone, not silent, pre advance your social alliance
Sometimes I get paranoid, and start to believe
That the old toys destroys themselves with my weed
I read, and recite the words on my walls
Till my eyes merge into force and I start seeing timewarps
When I sit, I feeling like im standing
When I stand I feel like im jumping on the moon's landing
I move banging in the project's corriders
I object to the polite offering from the people next door
My dopy-ness opens up and wears off
But hunger come's and moves in my stomach's loft
My nickname on the street is the night jarga
Hunting for a fiver to buy myself a pint of lager
On the cornershop, I know the owner and his daughters hot
Buy her some quavers, she'll go on the pavement for a blowjob
Outside my mind divides from my physical entity
As I spray away my emotions, my life trouble remedy
I empart with breaker's, battling to expose faker's
Low lamers requesting battles, don't know im the bone maker
Gang's stalking, walking haunting till early morning
Looking for the next loner to jump and force him
For his wallet, lucky for me, I know knowledge
Of alternative routes to prevent me from being taken a hostage
And in my flat, I attack the page with my pen
Storing my hero's in the face of my mind again

If this was a puzzle...the pieces, are fittin right in the story line..

Props

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Fuck you

ye uppin still

guys, please dont sleep on such a good peice.

dont sleep

kind of abstract verse mixed with normal writing styles
i liked it for what it was
the flow started off really good....and then slowed down
dont know if that was intentional...
overall though it seemed to merge together well to tell the way of your living?
some parts were hard to grasp what their significance was but i got the jist of most of it
i couldnt pick out any standout lines really....just all came together well
liked the last paragraph as well
props
peep mine if u will

lol k thanx

still upping

wow...incredible man..you elavated and really put everything togethert in this piece...very well done....i wud critique it but there is nun dawg...great work

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The Weathers Art
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108673
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Secluded
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851
Open Your Eyes
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yo yo this was heavy
I wanna hear more shit from you like this
keep the good flows flowin

Peace

ill piece dawg, noffin wrong with it, an every time i see one of ur drops u've lyrically adavnced onto another lever
props

thanx for the replies, upping this though

opps i ment to hit new topic and i hit reply.

ill edit this with a reply later

ok, still upping this peice though, i put heart into dis