Verse One:

Who you wanna be like, a man or woman with vision to see right?
Do you have any passion to be right, or be light?
Shinin' like you're a diamond or would it be tight
to roll with a cat, who holds a gat and lets the weed light?
Quick to brawl and get involved in a street fight
Quick to ball, forget it yall, he's enthralled with street life
He's gotcha thinking that he's hype but these type
never sleep tight they stay awake countin' the sheep, right?
He's got the sweet life? Please! "Sike!"
He's phony, he's really lonely that's why he clubs every week night
He can't handle the storm, he's like a cheap kite
He need's Christ, he's the opposite of Levite:
Unholy and a contradiction like "FREE PRICE,"
blind as a bat or better yet blind as three mice
Either way you look at it the crooks get it,
don't look at me like I'm pathetic, the Book said it!

Verse Two:

Do you wanna be the kind of sis' that does work with a kiss
workin' her hips, and gotta use a skirt and a twist
I'm certain of this, love's what you're searchin' for, Miss
but earth's an Abyss so that love you're certain to miss
‘cause most guys from birth, grow to be guys that flirt
putting sweet lies to work so as to disguise the purp(ose)
which is to shoot the gift, just to get you to shift
your views cause if he can make you switch
He's got the tools to get in the "skins,"
you know that that's been the trend
Why would he get a wife when he can just get a "friend,"
and with a little gin after a spin in the Benz
with some R&B he can "hit" again and again
I know it's sort of bugged but now I'm sailing on the waters of
experience, I know a wife and a daughter's love
So I'm up on things that pertain to "dime pieces"
My mind reaches to share things that remain after my rhyme ceases
Let him keep the cheese, never let him eat for free
Let him meet your needs and never let him sleep and leave
God's plan is that you marry so the creep must cleave
and learn about a woman's worth like Alicia Keys
Dudes and dudettes should both do that
So I'm exposing this like film when light gets to it
You need to learn about the way the righteous do it
You gotta see what life looks like when Christ gets to it

***Lets make like Joey Lawerence and WWWHHHHOOOAAAA!!*** HAHAHAA.....or like Black Rob and WHOA!!!

__________________
*R.I.P*
Jimmy L. , Louis L. , Aj R. , Tyler R. , Chris R., Dan W. , Matt F.......
" You all will never be forgotten and your spirits live within us all!!! R.I.P*"


" So for the 2nd time [The Pharisses] summoned the man who had been blind and said
"Speak the truth before God. We know this man is a sinner."
"Wether he is a sinner I do not know."
:The man replied:
"All I know is this...Once I was blind and now I can see"
John 1x 24-26

shit i forgot to post a decent reply muh bad hahaha
This was a decent peice, not great but decent. Your flow kinda fell off at times and your world play could have been alot better as well. I was feel'n your 2nd verse alot more than the 1st mainly b/c it had a nice story type vibe to it. Not a bad drop....keep elivate'n and doin yo thang, 1

__________________
*R.I.P*
Jimmy L. , Louis L. , Aj R. , Tyler R. , Chris R., Dan W. , Matt F.......
" You all will never be forgotten and your spirits live within us all!!! R.I.P*"


" So for the 2nd time [The Pharisses] summoned the man who had been blind and said
"Speak the truth before God. We know this man is a sinner."
"Wether he is a sinner I do not know."
:The man replied:
"All I know is this...Once I was blind and now I can see"
John 1x 24-26

yeah, this read alright, but didn't think much of the content, it seemed a bit simple in places, i agree the second verse was better than the first, it was a better length aswell, you had some ok multis, keep dropin, and you will progress...not bad.........

can you check these, its the first and second verses, just posted on different days.........
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...&threadid=87520
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...&threadid=87713

this was a pretty tight verse. i was feelin yo verse the structure and the flow was coo. try to get a chrous next time that will complete the song. nice piece


holla