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Old 10-26-03, 09:46 AM   #1
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So Much Pain
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Through out life i've grew to inticapate actions
surving false and betrayal of my satisfactions
Purposing to the unknown cause im lost easy
even with the road infront of me i go crazy
Thinking i'm going opisite of what is ment
supposing what is now an then whats decent?
Or does it matter, am i just another eliment
from the globe that left me ice froze an serpelant
Tied in'a knot with my thoughts im a steaming pot
waiting to stop time but i cant turn off the clock
Acrobatic to hate im duxkin an dodging my own fate
cant eat whats on my plate im anerexic to hexed state
Always caught in'a puddle of blood from a knife on my arm
craving that one day i'll be guided an angle be my lucky charm
Goes to show even though lifes a prision wit no ceiling
i still travel at light speed through my torture of feeling
Aginy of abuse there no use to move on im cursed
lifes a herbal verse nothing could get any worse
Absent love, freaky ill mental dicesions based apon
the life im living an the empty heand wit no palm
To grasp onto something,i turn to absalutly nothing
air for lungs dispairing my death keeping me surving
Yet who wants to live in this dumpster of life
eventful disasters a murder on t.v it was my wife
A astroid shower in my mind at every frequent time
prevailing me into dust to dust imagining im fine
I'm a plant with no root how can i maintain
In this game called life...wit so much pain
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Old 10-26-03, 07:51 PM   #2
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hmmm where to start, simple put, i liked this piece, it was a nice easy read. on the surface of it it seems to be pure emotion, which it is, with one message, but once you think about it and look in you see how deep it goes, all the branches it takes. i thought the way you portrayed your feelings here made it an effective piece, it read well and sounds good!!

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Old 10-26-03, 08:18 PM   #3
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thanks for the feed uppen
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Old 10-27-03, 05:44 PM   #4
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YUPPEN FOR SOME FEEDBACK
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Old 10-30-03, 10:32 PM   #5
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Cat's shouldn't sleep on this. Pretty good drop. Emotional contant was there, and you had some pretty nice lines as well. "cant eat whats on my plate im anerexic to hexed state", that line jumped out at me the most. The peice moved smoothly as well. Overall, good drop.
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Old 10-31-03, 04:00 PM   #6
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thanks uppen
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Old 10-31-03, 04:15 PM   #7
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good drop playa, keep it up, the other two people pretty much sed it
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