i jus dont get it, y we helpin the hate
the races chaces the endless hate
whitie in the hood gettin shot down for color
nigga gettin 50 to life cuz he's my brother
niggaz gettin gunz from the whites on the brink
shootin each other, whites watch, we're extinct
a whitie wana bring the drugz from l.a
and smoke the jay while niggaz get judgement day
we gotta fight back, we gotta have swagga
but we cant get up like palmeiro on viagra
we killin all ova, the hatas get whacked up
jacked up stacked up jus get up and back up
we try to make it work, are backs r bent
but we just aint ready for a black president
its so easy now to get a piece
the war in the middle east, slayin ma little niece
stead of workin of poverty
they got a war on theft so the police can bother me
they got ahold of me, right on the back of my neck
jus to put me in check, my niggaz hit the deck
and the blood of my peeps lookin like an ocean
we try to live the justice, try to show devotion
but the lovas were late, their love for us was great
but i got shot down so now its just too late

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u prolly dont have a job and u sleep at da dock
put u outa ur misery so u can hang wit tupac
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Onyx_Storms(ko) 86barsfromva(ko) XtremeFlow(5-1) crazypatient(ko) crazypatient gorillaquantity(ko) pro.fess.in.all(5-1)

its time fo' me and my niggaz to start takin control of this nation. lets end the violence and silence the hatas

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u prolly dont have a job and u sleep at da dock
put u outa ur misery so u can hang wit tupac
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Onyx_Storms(ko) 86barsfromva(ko) XtremeFlow(5-1) crazypatient(ko) crazypatient gorillaquantity(ko) pro.fess.in.all(5-1)

yo can i get some feedback on this shit?

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u prolly dont have a job and u sleep at da dock
put u outa ur misery so u can hang wit tupac
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Onyx_Storms(ko) 86barsfromva(ko) XtremeFlow(5-1) crazypatient(ko) crazypatient gorillaquantity(ko) pro.fess.in.all(5-1)

I'm gay I will stop spamming my Open Mics like this.

Sorry!!!!


holla mine and ill holla urs..!!








-self is god.

its time fo' me and my niggaz to start takin control of this nation. lets end the violence and silence the hatas

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u prolly dont have a job and u sleep at da dock
put u outa ur misery so u can hang wit tupac
Victims
Onyx_Storms(ko) 86barsfromva(ko) XtremeFlow(5-1) crazypatient(ko) crazypatient gorillaquantity(ko) pro.fess.in.all(5-1)

yo i feel ya my nigga, all this hate bullshit has got to stop.
but about ur rap it was good, i was definatly feelin it, the flow was good,it all went together nice,overall a nice drop my nigga, keep doin ur thing. PEACE

oh, ya think you could check this out and tell me what ya think.thx

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=87620

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Niggas we dont work with tecks, we work with BOMB threats/
So fuck with us and i'll have WORD aim FAT BOY 2 at you and your whole set/- S.S.

shit wrong link, heres the right on, thx
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=87854

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NUCLEAR CONCEPTS- DA ILLEST CREW

Niggas we dont work with tecks, we work with BOMB threats/
So fuck with us and i'll have WORD aim FAT BOY 2 at you and your whole set/- S.S.

Maybe if you learned how to type, and stop saying rasict words you would have a chance at making a point...

fuck u nigga u cant even spell racist right u stupid mutha fucka

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u prolly dont have a job and u sleep at da dock
put u outa ur misery so u can hang wit tupac
Victims
Onyx_Storms(ko) 86barsfromva(ko) XtremeFlow(5-1) crazypatient(ko) crazypatient gorillaquantity(ko) pro.fess.in.all(5-1)

I feel you have a good message dog, you have to look at the mathmatics of things on here though, playa...don't expect to much feedback becasue most cats on this board are white so pro-black hood shit is not the first priority with them.....

As far as skill wise. You o.k, some things you gotta work on. Try to be more creative with your flow and slick with your words. Especialy on a subject like this alot of people done touched on it so you gotta make yours standout, na'mean...
Keep writing

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See what happens when I read a wack verse, it rubs off on me. I can't even spell right. Damn, and kid, I know words bigger than your mothers waist belt...which isn't big considering she's a crack whore.