I dont need short cuts im takin ya hoods route/
Any beef I'll be puttin ya whole hood out/
On my toes always keepin a look out/
No guns so i guess we will be bringin the wood out/
I dare for you to run up thats like calling all the streets out/
Got my bat so i can Barry Bonds ya teeth out/
Do it wit precision as if a nigga was gettin paid man/
Bring in the boys hold you down while ya house get raid man/
You a sweet cat you dont bleed you pour Kool-Aid man/
Im a picky nigga only bang with the hardest/
Push ya luck but how you gonna put down the heartless/
You dont wanna jump up but im feelin kinda froggy/
You could be innocent but my judgement is kinda foggy/
You dont need to show ya fear i can smell it and it makes me cocky/
Put you in intensive care as you fade away ya family will scream ya name as if you was rocky/
Dont judge me cause my age i could be king of the streets/
Im real most cats only claimin they street/
Salvation of Hip-Hop is already out of our reach/
It's like all that is fake came and took the game away from the streets/
Livin in the US im just Surrounded by fake/
Whats sad is that America was even founded by snakes/
But still there is no one hard enough to take me outta this place/
Cause they know things can get heated like Kobe and a white girl in confind space/

This my first post on this site so criticize me or whatever. Just tell me how to improve.

feelin da flow..... you could work on some wordplay... that wouldent hurt

your style aint emcee lik its mo towards da streets....
so you could work in mets n puches jus to make it intresting and still get you point across..

it aint bout wha you say its how you say it...

keep elavatin....

dawg that was ill your word play was just a little simple and kind of predictable other than that you stuck to the script it was a hot read-"ONE"

it was pretty complete, didnt let down, overall a good effort