Potent

What does birth define?. . It means to start dying
Do you recline wit a bleeding heart or start trying?
Arts crying out to be captured unlike all else living
We'll never find rapture while are health is slipping
Never getting better & forever etching on retinas
We're really being silenced never retching editors
Thats the gag. .We are continuelly being silenced
If you loose the cries of a baby, thats yo retirment
Or loosing violence, your introducing confinement
Reducing refinement leads to the bleeding hearts
Pulling yo hair out over life shows receeding parts
Does it!? Or when your bringing life into this earth
Or are you!? Including actors upon sites that hurt
Listen to birds chirp or mentality of men go bizzurk
The system doesn't work. .WE DO!!
[I]My heart bleeds for all those used!!


Ruthless

. .Ruthless. .

How deep can one sink in such disblief/
How far can one swim amid a sea of grief/
How is one safe from the company sorrow keeps/
And how stup!d is the human race/
How unknowing, mean and disgrace/
How wastefully used is the seamen/
Which all humans from none begun/
If this is the fate for humans all/
There is no cure but to rot in hell/
If I died, would you even know/
Just one little bullet, one single blow/
its place; and its facial expression, in an irony/
Such joy, is swept away by a salty tear, one too many/
And sweet memories of with them/
becomes a haunting ordeal, which fates redeam/
How can my faith remain and my skin not feel pain/
if sleep has become the cousin of death I'm going insane/
An eye for an eye I guess that was a Myth/
No1 is immortal but thats how much we fear Death/

Thar was some hot shit both of the verses was ILL i liked it

not a bad peice...
potent had good structure, as always... his vocab was
really good, and the content was definately there... it
was a really nice drop that you had....

Ruthless- your shit flowed alright... you should put more
content into your verse so readers can visualize the shit you
say... plus it would help you on your structure... other than that
you had a pretty ill verse... very nice to read...

Props^^^

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