This is only 40 seconds long. I'm workin on it still with my group Crewcial. This is my verse. Please listen to it and give me some feedback on what is good and tell what i need to change. Thanks.

aw sorry i forgot to give u the link. www.soundclick.com/cyphersoundzz then go to the one the says "Snippet (basketball soundzz)". thank u.

Yo i like that beat kid, but it just seems like yer off that beat, not rhythem wise, but more attitude, demeaner, you need to rip a lil' harder to that beat, more energy (not crazy), just more confident energy and also no lyrics really made me say damn, that also comes with a tighter delivery, good luck, and check out some of my shit in the audio battles and song section. My page to the cuts is below, check the threads first so you can give some feedback. 1

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/k...ablissmusic.htm

thanks for responding. im gonna check out ur stuff now.

i did a basketball verse b4 haha..ne way, i do agree with the other guy, u jus need better mic presence man and everything shall be grand!

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