Orikle-.Disorderly Descendance.
Monstar-Off to hell we go.
wogsta-Mind Theory

Post-Halloween, this is the shit that happens the night after halloween, or what has happned to me and frineds in the past.


Left a day ago, frineds and I going to a party, sure to be no cloths
Sent of Halloween as left my nose, I stopped goin four years ago
We enter onto the premisis, hear the music bangin, electric shit
Projected image shows a picture of my X-Girlfrinds slit, holy shit
I don't care, she was a btich, she neds to burn in hell, damn witch
Sudden pain in my side, a stitch, pain from her nails, beg to be itch
Fucked 9x a week, maybe more, peeps began to call her a whore
On her chest a name she boar, my name was there, not no more
Enough thought, it's time to party, we enter to hear laughs, hardy
All the guys got long hair like Jeff Hardy, lookin like a little retardy
I see my X sitten in the corner cryin, I hope that she soon be dien
She said she was sorry for leavin me, bitch, I knew she was lien
I went there anyway to tell her off, face a littl pale like Igor Karkoff
She started to smile and said, "Lets get off", my dick wasent soft
She is hott as hell, even when she sad, I want to fuck her, so bad
Oh well, X's can be fun, her expressin turned fast from sad to glad
Went up to a room and she got on her knees, she is such a tease
My cock comes out and into her hand, I pull back to hear, "Please"
I let her take it into her mouth, she is slowly takeing it in and out
Damn she good at this, rapidly increases makin me wanna shout
She stops and says she needs to get some out of this experience
So I take off her pants and lay her on the bed, this is ingenius....
She begs so I put it in and pump slowly, all I hear is her moaning
My pace instead of increasing is slowing, get ready, start zoneing
I slam harder and harder, she starts jirating and I know she done
I hope nothing comes out of this experience, especialy a baby son
Afterwerds she told me something that could've..made me kill her
She broadcasted us fuckin on that screen, to every little pervert...

Now that is one long as verse, and belive it or not, that shit was actually true, but hey, that shit was exsillerating.

Feedback on this siht would be appreciate please, I want to see what you guys got to say.

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ok great fukkin drop had great rhymes and shit like that but damn dude fukked up story to be puttin in a rhyme. BUT really good drop i'd like to read some of ur other shit nice work man.
-KeMy$t

I thought this was a hot piece...... you astounded me by writing a rap about kuntucky fried chicken, and you've done it again.... this flow works very well, and your vocab is considerably better than before... you just need to work on your actual rhymes.... add some multis in, and vocab + wordplay still needs some work..... your internals work great though, and the whole piece flows well.... and your very creative - i'll keep looking for your open mics

7.5/10

Somebody check out my open mic, "Mind Theory", please

Yeah i agree...this was a good drop....it flowed nicely i thought, didnt really get off at all...your vocab was nice, nothing really wrong there...structured it nicely....multies were real nice.....content was good, interesting story though...overall it was a good piece...keep at it....and keep dropping.

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