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Old 11-03-03, 10:11 PM   #1
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Windows Hanging, In A Vertical Fashion.
Open Doors Banging, A Classical Ration.
Indented Minds, Hit By Blunt Objects.
Smoking All Kinds, Making Shit Complex.
Stare At A Cup, Full Or Quite Empty.
Swear At Enough, Pull At The Bent Me.
Shit Turns Scary, As Life Is Queried.
Hits Yearn Varied, As Mics Lay Buried.
All The Facts, Equal To One Purpose.
I'm Nervous, Death Begins To Surface.
One More Toke, With Lifes Last Breath.
Lift Drawers Hoax. As I Inhale The Meth.
Embracing Death, Not A very Easy Thing.
Chasing Breath, I Finally Start to Sing.
Heavenly Melodies, With Concentrated Sin.
The Hell Of Me, My Life Finally Begins.
Cracking Skulls, As My Mind Goes Blank.
Non-Existent Pulse, As I Flip The Crank.
The Life Of Me, Drugs Control The Scene.
It's Fightin Me, Screens Stand Between.
Surreal Instances, Overcoming Thoughts.
Real Hints At It, Feelings To Be Bought.


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Old 11-03-03, 10:15 PM   #2
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deep...i liked it sir
i got the image of an OD'ed crack head thinking this
hope thats what you were going for...
imagry and flow were top notch as usual
vocab was well used...and the 'Sureal Flow' is still your best aspect
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Old 11-03-03, 10:27 PM   #3
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i hope your not really fuckin wit all those drugs..your future is in jepordy if you are..you have talent and i would hate to see it go to waste..nevermind, a few drugs are ok! ha ha!
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Old 11-03-03, 10:28 PM   #4
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Yes Please...
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Old 11-04-03, 12:35 AM   #5
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one of your dopest pieces yet sureal... good job yet again...


















*steals it*
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Old 11-04-03, 12:03 PM   #6
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Drugs are fun...

Mad Multi's. Only one bad thing with them though; when you focus on them, you lose the actual point of what your trying to say sometimes. Thats why I don't bother with multi's, even though I write them, I do it after I write the point I want.

"Smoking All Kinds, Making Shit Complex"

Complex poop?
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Old 11-04-03, 12:37 PM   #7
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Dope..
Wasnt Feelin The Topic
But You Werked Into It
Overall.. Above Average
Piece.. Good Shit
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Old 11-04-03, 01:07 PM   #8
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hmmmm
mixed result
i'm not a huge fan of short bar verses cos i think it restricts greatly what u could say and miss out
it was an alright drop nonethe less
vocab etc was good and so was the flow
but i dont think u expressed feelings etc in it that well
still a decent read but no where near your best imo
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Old 11-09-03, 03:32 PM   #9
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Nice...Everything Flowed Really Well...Nice Imagery...Not The Best Of Topics But Did Make It Into A Very Good Piece...I Wouldnt Say His Best Piece...But None The Less...A Very Good Piece..
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Old 11-09-03, 04:54 PM   #10
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This was interesting, came out as an eccentric piece with nice use of imagery and multies. Pretty dope shit here and there and an overall decent piece.
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Old 11-11-03, 04:25 PM   #11
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Nice to see your finally getting internals and multi's into your verses, just be careful you dont over do it and sacrifice the content for multi's and ish, all in all this wasnt a bad drop, short, siomple, and to the point, held my attention, transition was decent, flow was a little rustic as i read it but not bad
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