i'm known as bloodshedd, cause i split skullz n get head//
imbrassing wiggaz fullishness now they faggot ass dead//
like eminem i got some skeletons inn ma closet i'll rather keep that on the dl instead// i've rolled up on this rap site wit a big bang// i see these cats trying to friend me but i neglect them n lef em hang// yea i understand that some of u can flow nice, come step to me the bloodshedd and feel ma expensive spice//i've just arrived n i'm reaking havic i mus have tol u twice// i toar arpart thugz network now i'm bringing ma game to this new fucking place// waiting for challengers thats looking to get laced//
i gotta be a comedian cause like mr burns one bitch got macedd// left him in shock n in the pool blood// i sat there and watched wit a bucket of blunt// battling me seriously mus be a stunt// cause all the snitches that stepped to me got kicked hard jus like a punt//

^ not too great...not horribly wack either....no good punchlines and your rhymescheme was weak...atleast you did have attempted multis and a decent flow....as a freestyled verse this woulda been dope but for a written/keystyle it's a little below average..just tone ya skills and take advice as a stepping stone rather than a diss....u'll get better with time...

peace

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it was a nice intro from here just elivate

you got nice lyrics but work on the flow a little more. and check the spelling on some words. keep it up though

Your flow is off, your rhyme scheme is simple and your topic is poor. I hate these introduction pieces. Write something of conceptual worth for a change. Stopping talking about yourself. You'll gain a lot more respect from me.

ALRIGHT .... JUS I'MMA TAKE ALL UR MUHFUCKING ADVICES ZEEN!!! its appreciated... respect is to gain, but loosing respect don't bother me simply n plain... but i'll take ur advice still

woah, slow down there potna...there's too many tight cats up on here for you to come on here dissin right away, but i guess if you're lookin for challengers then rb is the right place

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let's get this shit straight, i'm here to eliminate- them squadz wit feminine traits, there's no escape!

yo B... i knowwww---- let me get murrkeeddd, through that i guess i'll learn, THIS IS THE WAY I AM REAL LIFE, I AIN'T GON BACK DOWN FROM NOBODY... straight uppp... but LOL, I KNOW THERE ARE NUFF TOUGH CATS UP IN HURR THATS WHY I'M CALLING THEM OUT TO TEACH ME A LESSON ZEEN, i don't give a fuck, i'mma jus keep putting out rhymes, if u take it the wrong way shit thats ur prob, if u wan battle sure WHY THE FUCK NOT, soooooooo blood me up if u got skill, if u whacker than me, then shit ur ass would gett better soon... MORE INSITES, I WAN KNOW WAT YALL ARE SAYING

Work on the flow and elevate..thats allI got to say..aight peace