you think u know best jus
because u spit one good verse
conversating wit me about
ur bran new purse
i see soo many intellectual minds
spreading their dangerious rhymes
they burst flowing shredding peepz
while leaving their remains to a nurse
all u catz with strong fire be
manupilating my mind
telling me to sloww down cause
they don't know about ma rhymes
but i keep building taking in the
advice of the "wise"
the anguish i have building inside
i'm a gunna, i ain't afraid to get stunned
when i flow i ain't never afraid to get bunned
but get me angry is crutial u'll get runned
let me hear wat u have to say bout this
shit i showned

ok ok,. that was aiight...you coudl work on the flwo a lil bit, i can tell from the flow you have this is supposed to go a lil slow which is cool, that's your style, but soem of your end syllabel rhymes were so so at best, work on your rhyming some, your message was solid, i felt it, your vocab was a lil young but that's cool too, work on the rhymes, get soem battles, (im up for whenever) up ya rep and ull be fine

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This Piece Sucked Dude....u SERIOUSLY Need To Up Your Wordplay.....Throw In Some Multis....Add Some Imagery.......Think Hard.....


DoPeYz.

Your replies to others?

Little weak..will excuse it though..just work on wordplay and elevate..will all come with time..later peace

it was aiight dawg it still needs work and shit try putting in multis and make tha lines a bit longer


Aiight Peace (v)