(Opening Hook)
Look…Watch those tears fall
From innocent eye’s…
A pain deeply embedded
In her heart and in her mind…
A child starving, not from hunger
But from family ties…
Another Soul forgotten
Through the shuffle of time…

(Rap)
Her present’s in a mess
And her future’s in distress
It’s time to put this all to rest
And do for HER what’s only best
Feel the struggle in her mind
Taste the sorrow of her time
Responsibility yours and mine
And a hatred redefined
She's acting out and crossing lines
Can’t you see this are you blind?
While our daughters heart is crying
No we can not keep denying
Cuz inside I know she’s dying…

(Closing hook)
Listen…Hear those broken dreams
Lost to sobering cries…
Her innocence is stolen
Not considered a crime…
Hear the sorrow, hear the anguish,
Thinking love is just a lie…
A world upside down
Happiness she can not find…



This was just a short piece I worte after having a conversation with my daughter. I have a degree in child devlopment and seen the conflict in her eyes. I used this song to approach her Mother in a way that only emotion could. I put every ounce of emotion into the recording and sent it to My X. She got the message without argument and we have been working at healing the damage our seperation has caused our daughter. Things are getting better for her (Destinie) now.

Bounce....

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Its good to have a gift to let out your emotions. It was a very good read, their isn't much that I can say about it. It could have
been better with a stronger vocabulary, but it's a song so it came
out well without. The structure was great and the way it was
said left much to the imagination. Keep Writing.

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you can tell this piece was from the heart
that's all that matters
being able to recognize and try to better the situations you are in yourself and the ones you put others through is real good

"Listen…Hear those broken dreams
Lost to sobering cries…
Her innocence is stolen
Not considered a crime…"
^This line had the most impact on me.. i felt it
nice drop

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Don't Look Into My Eyes Forgotten
Understanding Once Again
"It requires wisdom to understand wisdom:
the music is nothing if the audience is deaf."

^^to your sig if you think of music in your brain so that shit aint right.
.you have urself for audience.
and nice peace.

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this was a nice read, although it was sad, it held alot of emotion, alot of pain and perhaps some anger.

this is a piece that i would love to hear in audio

the flow was nice, and i liked the short structure, and seeing as this piece was meant more for message and getting feelings across it will cover up an ything that might not be up to standard, but i cant find anything. i think the vocab was better in this piece left simple.

this piece was felt, you have a gift in getting feelings across. good luck with the x and Destinie. i saw pics of you and her in the memeber pics made me think very highly of you, and i can tell how much love you have for her, keep care.

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Thanks to all taking time out of your day to leave reply's. You can be sure they are well appreciated, I look to you all elements to aid in my elevation. Much respect to everyone of you.

It was meant to be a simple and to the point, I was not trying to get the main reader (my X) confused as to my message. It hit home loud and clear, exactly what I wanted. I can be complex when it's needed, but in this case it was not a factor.

Filed thnaks for your observation, as you suspect, my daughter is my life and breath. Without her there is no reason for me, I have such a wonderful relationship with her, it brings tears to the eye's of those who see us together. She is everything and then some to me, I only live to provide her stability and guidance, a true blessing in my life for sure. I
m glad you took the time to look at the pictures I posted of us. I hope you got a chance to look at pages 4 and 5, I think that's were more pictures are. Well thanks for you time and kind words.

Much love and respect,

Bouncer

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