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ClaustrophobicS Present: "Less Fortunate"
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She Was Treated Differently,.. She Wasn't Beautiful..
She Had Greeted Misery.. Her Thoughts Were Mutual.. Mis-Treated; Ignored.. More Often Than Not.. Believe To Be Poor.. Sores Washed In Her Spot.. .. Living With What She Didn't Have.. Friends Were Seldom.. Though She Tried.. Again They'd Tell Them.. Though They Lied.. Poor And Young.. Resented By Many.. More Than Some.. Tormented By Plenty.. Presented Herself.. As Best She Could.. Bent In For Help.. W. The Mess She Was.. Wish She Could Change.. The Life She Lived.. N' Wished The Same.. For The Likes She Hid.. Fell In Love.. But It Didn't Fall Back.. Tell To Some.. Not At Like That.. Crush That Burned.. He Doesn't Care.. Love She Yearned.. Wasn't There.. Asked The Guy.. Fool, But Had To Be Sure.. Eyes That Cried.. For The School That Laughed At Her.. The Hate She Brew.. Stormed Extreme.. The Fate She Knew.. Born Difformities.. Revenge She Wanted.. She Couldn't Get.. Tends To Silence.. She Didn't Know Yet.. .. Taking A Stand .. Searched For Materials.. Their Were Alot Of These.. Birthed A Miracle.. With Simple Commodities.. School Wouldn't Be The Same.. This She Was Sure.. Foor Wasn't Her Name.. Or Things That Were Heard.. Mind Was Set.. Love For The Man, She Got Burned Down.. Time To Let.. Him See How She Turned Out.. Faces That Stared.. Smirked Her Lips.. Places She Cared.. Didn't Hurt To Fit.. The Time Came.. The Man Stood Up n' Stopped.. His Mind Blank.. Her, Or Wasn't It Not.. Hallways Gazed.. Nervous, He Spoke.. Always Amazed.. Deserved To Know.. Confidence In his Look.. Assurance In His Eyes.. Stopped What He Took.. When He Heard Her Decline.. She Looked For Truth.. n' Left More Of It.. She Stood For Youth.. n' All Less Fortunate Dropped On.. Word Perfect - The Ultimate Competition Trip Marxx - Hate Obsenity - Renegade (remix) Last edited by Auspicious : 11-07-03 at 03:08 PM. |
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flawless from content topic delivery and graphicness i loved it
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Dope drop man. You stayed on the topic and the story you told was ill. Honestly Don't see nothin wrong with it.
Hallways Gazed.. Nervous, He Spoke.. Always Amazed.. Deserved To Know.. Confidence In his Look.. Assurance In His Eyes.. Stopped What He Took.. When He Heard Her Decline.. ^^ That was def dope. Keep droppin cuz. -Formula. ** Return the favor N drop some feedback to my open mic when I get it up. . . Greatly Appreciated ** |
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Ight Fo Show..
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i agree with all these fuckaz, you are just ill
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okay. .
Nice piece bud. .Props The content was sick, trully off the hook, the flow was solid throughtout but I have to say it was a lil basic, but that wasn't a flaw in this piece though, but it would have made it better to have more inners & have put in multis, the idea was great. . Pz |
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is po1ent blind? Everyline had a multi in it. some tight work there, you came out siiiiiiiick. Quote:
This ill, you mos def came out good on this peice, and the imagery was shown hard through your multis. Although i thought this was more poetry then open mic |
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Once Again Hot Shit Very Enjoyable And Yet Very Close To Sureals Style Auspicious Got Mad Skill I Swear To God Props To Ya Homie I'll Be Lookin For More
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i have to agree this was another ill drop my u, liked the concept, structure, flow vocab, it all went together tight as fuck.....yeah nice one dawg...pc
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