Damn girl i still miss you.. your blonde hair blue eyes...
Your brotha called and said you lay down and cry...
I'm sorry girl i was acting like dat...
I'm sorry that i called your sister fat...

I still love you im not sure if you do to. I was dumb when i told you to stop sucking your thumb.Just remember i'll alwayz luv u.alwayz.

I hope you give me a second chance...
I remember the days we would dance...
Remeber 2 weeks ago when jon hit on u and i kikied his ass...
i thought that would be a sign but i geuss not...
oh baby give me 1 more chance..
And won't you be my girlfriend...

I still love im not sure if you do to. I was dumb when i told you to stop sucking your thumb.Just remember i'll alway luv u. alwayz....................

last line is i still love you

i'm glad to see that your a young blood because that really didn't have vocab, flow, or rhymes. Just keep up on the writting and u will improve

ok thanx

Abstract in structure, I couldn't find any common ryhme scheme but I guess you may have purposely done that. I think you could have done a better job by cleaning up the format. It had emotion to it, but it is over riden by the structure, it's all over the place. I have seen some cats pull off this type of piece before, but they had a even structure which helped. Keep elevating that's what were all here for, don't let anyone tell you otherwise..

Bounce..

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