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Old 11-12-03, 04:23 PM   #1
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[Diverse Soldiers] ft/ fo'trill

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Title Diverse Soldiers
Lyrics RythmicTendicies, fo'Trill©
Topic Why, We are The Real Soldiers

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RythmicTendicies

I’m A Soldier, A Normal Being, Non-Militia...
But My Free Speech Is Streamed Through, A Tight Filter...
Drained Of All Truth, But The Theories Are Still Maintained...
My Mind Has Been Bettered n’ Bashed, However –
The Reality Is Retained n’ My Confusion Is Explained...
I Seem To be, The Only One Who Knows What The Agreement Contains...
The Disbandment of Paramilitary’s, Decommissioning Of Weapons...
But They Ignored It, And Had The Ak-s ON Automatic Settings...
Shooting Up Bars, Riding Unremorsefully Around In Unmarked Cars...
Their Influential Ammunition Spreads Worldwide Like Sars...
Peace. Fuck You’d Sooner Find Extraterrestrial Life On Mars...
This Government’s, A Farce, Constantly Being Back Headedly Paid...
To Oversee Diabolical Affairs, Like Bush’s Terror Crusade...
But We Keep Living This Life, As The Groups Try To Degrade...
Our Physical Condition, Fuck Peace Ain’t Fuckin’ Nuclear Fission...
It’s Plainly Simple, Keeping Two Divided States Apart...
Humiliating Like Dead War Heroes Being Carried Of In A Cart...

[hook] x2 RythmicTendicies
We’re Diverse Soldiers, Surviving Ponderous Boulders...
Still Carrying The Weight On Our Already Weakened Shoulders...
Each Representing Their Own Definition Of The Hood...
Fuck, They’d Not Stop The Violence – Even If The Could...


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my brothers and I saw em hover in the sky/
for a week, they didn't speak, we thought they weren't alive/
for years they thrived, unwatched by our eyes, they despised/
what we built/ they released a disease unti the niles silt/
it spread/ made the contmainated lose their head/ we shot at em –
they ran off and ate their dead/ this was the prologue before they killed our civilization/
they manned there battle stations/ we fromed one nation/
and fought em off without a cure/ it was hard to endure/
safest wasn't secure to live we weren't sure/
kingdoms fell one proclaimed himself the fuher/
he was killed in fewer, than 28 days/
the atmosphere collapsed around paris it was pelted with micro waves/
we had to fight to stay, no ore rules no more right of way, no more light for day/
death became a cliché, the diseased ,did as they pleased/
moved with ease, no more traffic or industry, people came and hid wit me/
it was hell and they did a bid wit me, light wasn't safe dark wasn't either/
i had a dozen heaters, for those flesh eaters/ these creatures/
who once shered our blood lusted for ours/, we waged war for hours, neither side cowerd/
each side fought for power, if they won they'd embellish, a hellish state, this was fate/
i unleashed hate, they over took us my flesh was stretched and i was ate/
they destroyed everything at large, it felt good to them being in charge/
but soon the destroyed themsleves and starved, nothing on planet except –
shells of buildings and cars, earthen scars, the thing above was was god –
what we fought was us it's gods planet but we fucked teh bitch like it was are...

[hook] x4 RythmicTendicies
We’re Diverse Soldiers, Surviving Ponderous Boulders...
Still Carrying The Weight On Our Already Weakened Shoulders...
Each Representing Their Own Definition Of The Hood...
Fuck, They’d Not Stop The Violence – Even If The Could...
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Old 11-12-03, 04:27 PM   #2
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Nice collab. Rythmic, You have a pretty dope flow to it, and you seemed pretty comfortable with the topic. F.T, Your structure was sloppy, but I could get a bit of a grip of the Message you were sending. The collab was pretty dope, Good shit.
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Old 11-13-03, 11:05 AM   #3
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uppin'
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Old 11-13-03, 12:08 PM   #4
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not bad collab

rhythmic..solid....flow was pretty good
i got a hold of what you were trying to say but somehow it didnyt have much of an impact
imagery was lacking along with some emotion...maybe its just cos im tired

fotrill...same thing...flow was decent....vocab though was really basic and needs bolstered plus your structure was very loose
not out standing but a decent read
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Old 11-13-03, 12:33 PM   #5
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i thought both verses were decent enought, but out of the two rhythmic, yours was more on point flow and structure wise, i liked the choice of topic, i wasn't too keen on the hook though, but in the whole not a bad drop from both of you's....aight....Pc
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Old 11-13-03, 07:51 PM   #6
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This is hott. It reminds me of my classic "Renegades and Soldiers" And RT what's goin up with our collab? Holla at ya boy.
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Old 11-14-03, 11:56 AM   #7
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thanks for the feed back
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Old 11-14-03, 12:02 PM   #8
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A Rhythmic Tendencies piece always amounts to somethin...10/10 for RT for flow and structure, and this this rhyme scheme fo'trill got is off tha chain, 10/10 FO trill...haha word...
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Old 11-15-03, 07:44 AM   #9
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^cheers dawg,^

uppin',

thanks for the replies.
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Old 11-15-03, 02:54 PM   #10
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and again
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