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Old 11-13-03, 06:36 PM   #1
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Rising Through The Ranks

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From when im young, yes, I been hittin from the adult lung
From the direction of reflection of the opposite gun
I don’t conform to the norm or the average life form
Been hittin dope from my dawn til the retribution of forlorn
My life in stages like through the ages primate to expert places
Medieval mages down to the slaves that acquire the low wages
Some gotta start low without thanks cos of bank, sets the ranks
Money is life, without it ya damned, sinking in the sand banks
Of ya situation, you cant!... Inflation greets with mixed appreciation
Realise in your life that one thing’s true that’s your underlying vocation
Which is success in your own, like your voice message on ya phone?
Meaning is up to you to, think and act like you wanna go-own (on)
A positive attitude is as good as a knife stabbing the employer, less crude
Time is experience, which brings positive or employable edible food
One more step in the ladder yes, uppin pay, a quick interlude
To rising further, a break for thinking, time to relax an a bit of drinkin
Another step more elevation for life in a journey of realisation
Ya cant get ya goals without targets to meet ya toll’s to meet ya roll
One day you’ll find existence has past resistance, no more a foal
A stallion, positioned strong set for living a financial ‘bong’ (stoned, relax)
Take a back seat, living life, prospering, with retirement lasting long……
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Old 11-13-03, 06:46 PM   #2
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sorry man i forgot to pst my replies...
rythmic......diverse
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Old 11-13-03, 06:48 PM   #3
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shit i didn't mean to post hen, did it by accident the other two, i cant remember other people have posted after so it doesn't show up, but i posted to 5...aight....sorry again
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Old 11-13-03, 08:26 PM   #4
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can i get some feed in this quick drop i did.......thnx
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Old 11-13-03, 08:57 PM   #5
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this was actually pretty good, it was kind of boring to read though. work on your flow it will make it less boring if it flowed better.

and i replyed to your PM
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Old 11-13-03, 10:59 PM   #6
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i liked your wordusage and delivery i wouldnt say boring to any degreee but brushing up never hurt no one
this was a olid read hit me for collab i got one for you
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Old 11-14-03, 12:40 AM   #7
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yo tight shit in that keep it drpin Peace (v)
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Old 11-14-03, 05:16 AM   #8
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yeah this was pretty tight!
good wordplay and structure but work on the flow..
8/10
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Old 11-14-03, 05:52 AM   #9
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this had some ill wordplay.... i liked your lyrics and you structured the song well.... you need to work on flow though, it was kinda difficult to read... other than that, you had some good stuff there.... keep dropping... 8/10

check out my open mic "Rap Magnetism" please.... thanks
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Old 11-14-03, 06:09 AM   #10
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nigga kid... i enjoyed it to tha fullest! 1 klove
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Old 11-14-03, 06:26 AM   #11
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YO LYRICS GOOD KEEP AT IT !!!
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Old 11-14-03, 07:06 AM   #12
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agree wit them 2
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Old 11-14-03, 07:24 AM   #13
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thnx for the feed, those who actually did, and not just freepost in here.......Pc.........
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Old 11-14-03, 10:18 AM   #14
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A bit long and your flow wasn't really great...

But I liked ya message and appreciate what ya tryin ta say.

Nice vocab, but like I said...

It was somehow structured or maybe worded in a way that, just to me, could have flowed alot better.

Cool drop over all...6.75/10
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