yo nukka, norm rules, 5-15 lines, 15 mins to write from check in

yo you there jay?....
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yo, ok checkin in,,,,,,...............
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yo, you call yourself jay yayo,
lets switch it, "yo, ya" your a ho/1
your rep as a battler is so so,
but i'm here to tell you its got to go/2 (your through)
my rhyme is to complex, it casts a major hex,
reading it is better than sex, it may cause a complex/3
fuck milk, get pot, you just want to get caught,
then you can go to jail, i hear you like the cock a lot/4
i'll crush you with words a flame,
when were done i'll be all that remains/5
and now i find myself asking, why?,
why am i batteling this guy?, sigh, i'd rather drink rye/6
it might make my line worse, mess up my verse,
but i'll leave you with a curse, you'll end up in a herse/7
and while your leaving in that mis-shaped car,
think being a good rapper, and how its so very far/8

a'ight checkin in................................................ .................................................. ..................

yo this nigga name is pine cone but he didnt come from a tree/
Is mr.yayo dawg ya lyrics cant even touch me/
U even look like 1 of those 2 santa's randofs anwer or pransa/
while in the backgound with elton brand backup dancers/
burn u alive just watch you/
look at ya name it make u look like a fool/
U try to be like me in this rap shit/
call me a hoe u a fagget u can even catch a punch line if u had a life size baseball mit/

alrigh rap, i left soem short lines so you have somewhat of an advantage, good luck ......... uppin(1)..............
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is nobody gonna vote?................... uppin (2),
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Flow: pine-cone
Multies: pine-cone
Opener: pine-cone
Finisher: jay yayo
Structure: pine-cone
Personals: tie
Punchlines: tie
Metaphores: pine-cone

Overall: pine-cone

yo jay-r you forgot to vode man............
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wack battle but ya will elevate if ya keep battling i would like feedback after this battle on my sig click on link but pine cone came nicer he had only 1 personals though about the avatar but he came nicer i liked his verse setup jay verse was wack both need to elevate
Vote~Pine

both werent that good,but i thought yayo would of gotten this after i read pine cones verse,,it was sorta elementary,,well both were but im voting for yayo on this one


vote yayo you ho!

sorry for clogging but that one i voted for was pine not yayo i fucked up the first one and didnt realize it

dude you have 9 posts, you cant vote.. buzz off.........
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