Its that time again for the snakeyes to reign/
Terror and pain as i dance for the rain/
Fuck any jewelry or fat gold chains/
My style goes the distance like Prefontane/
All that materialistic shit slows the train/
No need to change, i stay the same/
See I don't be rapping bullshit that may sound strange/
I know my shit cuz i take out info from my own page/
While wanabe gansta rappers set the stage/
They amuse ignorant fans at a fast rate/
One catch phrase is all you need to get da fame/
Cancerous jingle sounding wack and lame/
But still some suckas think it sounds tight/
Hoes, bitches and gun fights and living the lavish life/
What can i say, thats what they do to get paid/

real...that's the best way to describe this....llyrically a lil weak, but i loved the message....real

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<center>HemiSphere
The Write Side Of Your Mind</center>

i think you could do alot better it was just too basic for my liking, and i felt the title didnt fit the verse non the less you only have to improve a couple things......vocab is a must to add some edge to ur style...............

yea this was really basic...u had multis though..and a decent flow so it'd be decent for an audio..but u didn't really have any punchlines or metaphors....+ your rhymes were pretty basic....just work on your stuff a little more and u'll get the hang of it...u seem like ur not NEW to rapping..but you seem like your new to the style of hiphop on this site...neway elevate..and don't take my criticism as a personal thing

peace

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