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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...7649#post907649
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...7653#post907653 http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...7659#post907659 this is a Topical battle verse. I tried to focus more on metaphors then much else, trying to bring a point to the reader. Dirt. Yes dirt. It doesn't sound like much, when your hear it at this time Knowing that its the second most common thing you'll find Next to the water...which on the ocean floor you find dirt From which food grows, and for which man has to work Dirt...That without it, The planet wouldn't be held together There wouldn't be nothing to pave pavement,falling forever And the planets safety, what peacemakers really yearn Knowing from dust we came, and right into the dirt we return You take it for granted, step on it, and not even try to realize Dirt is the foundation for Earth, more than meets the eyes Dirt, fertile or not, its the springing waters for civilization Yet we pollute it, and don't even try take it to consideration Dirt What we take granted everyday, yet is so essential Without it, Then there is no need for life or it's credentials We have to be thankful, like a flower grows,civ. springs Trees that have roots inplanted on which birds sing Wer'e taking it for granted, since it holds things together But what would we be without it? Civilized People? Never Dirt...Be thankful you are here, because Your earths Cause Dirt...We think its so impure, but it has not one of our Flaws
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This was a very unique read. I liked your flow, but most of all i liked how this was set up, the way you described dirt and how we take it fr granted and such was sick that was very cool keep it up pz
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Gracias
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I like how you took something nobody sees and put into perspective through rhyme...this type of rap is what would change cash and cars to a stand up and move-ment
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Thanks, uppin for more comments.
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lol thats dope, never thought i would see a topic on dirt i probabley wouldnt listen to it if it was a audio id be like WTF. but it was intresting read, it inspired me to write about hair!
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^WoW...
oh and BTW Up
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Pretty tight drop, bringin' life to something noone cares about .. Got alot of creativity in this drop .. Keep up the good work ..
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^Thanks for the In depth review. Oh Please, don't hurt your fingers.
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^up
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Honestly...Up
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It's good to see rappers who rap on "REAL" shit. Liked it alot, it shows how imagnative you are, and how you abstract something around you into thoughts on paper.. Peace Keep droppin'...
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this was real good, i like the way it makes you think about dirt and how important it is..lol. anyway a real unique topic even though you didnt choose the topic you wrote a good piece and stayed on topic well. nice flow, just overall dope.
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Like...totally up.
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Take it from a person who has had poetry published: this is good stuff. I happen to think metaphors are important. Not a lot of rappers do that. It's good to be different.
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