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11-19-03, 08:59 PM
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This is my first post!
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To: you, my lady, this is my devine sign of love.
R.I.P September 3, 2002 1 year since the mishappen and... im still askin why im still shedin-tears cause we would be desending-in-the-years you knew my fears the hardcore thug within kicked out and the softness released with emotion... you gave devoition to the notion of me rappin For that ill never forget- I wish i was there to protect Never again, will I neglect... When i dream at night - i think about the Chi-West fight the delight of blood shed an inbred race - of such color as carmal, when i met you I knew, this lady was for me... But it must of been ment to be, you came to the scene and decided to intervene 4 years and runnin - been sonnin' so long My lovin for you is strong Parents hated me, but it didnt matter The more i speak of your lucious name i get sadder i try not to batter-myself-cuz-of-respect But i get madder-n-madder-cuz-of-regret... Rosa' i love you,just sayin ur name makes me fall to my knees with ease' i'd give everything up my life included to redue the night of September 3rd, the coldness will never fail to seduce me Come to me, use me... Nothing was above-the-view~ I'd like to finish it off wit a I-Love-you// With all my heart-ill never decipher a question, of you... I need you, R.I.P Queen Loca - King LiL LoCo Antonio Ramierz, Rosa Ramierz... Missed the date... peace
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11-19-03, 10:00 PM
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This is my first post!
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IP:
upp
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11-19-03, 10:45 PM
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*Just Try And Stop Me*
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it was there....good have came off harder...
but a flow, a few multies...wordplay was 4 the most part there... overall...a good piece.. i see wat ur comin at.... very understandable.. propz 2 ya .... good job and good luck
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11-19-03, 10:46 PM
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This is my first post!
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IP:
thanks nigga
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11-19-03, 11:19 PM
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This is my first post!
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IP:
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11-20-03, 11:56 AM
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one wink
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IP:
Hey, can you post up who you replied to?
Rules Thread Link - More Information On It Can Be Found Here Thanks Man. |
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11-20-03, 03:27 PM
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IP:
Good Job writing this. I enjoyed the piece, and i really could feel the emotion you wrote with. I hope this piece helped you express whatever u had to. nice. good luck
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11-20-03, 03:46 PM
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IP:
that was a deep piece and u did it well. keep it up
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11-20-03, 03:57 PM
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This is my first post!
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IP:
Replied to: A.T, LM, Keys
upp
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11-20-03, 04:04 PM
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..Soft Focus..
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IP:
shit...this hit pretty hard could have hit harder but it was there the emotion in your words stood out good drop man keep it up
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11-20-03, 04:10 PM
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This is my first post!
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IP:
thanks playa
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11-20-03, 05:17 PM
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This is my first post!
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uppp
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11-20-03, 06:13 PM
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This is my first post!
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IP:
uppp
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11-20-03, 06:42 PM
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IP:
It seemed really basic in the rhyme scheme and structure, seemed to me like it was more of an audio verse the way it was structured, content was actually decent and heart felt as i read it, good emotion, lines could use some power wording to make them hit hatrder when read and your transition has a loooooooooooong ass way to go but you've got potential
props. 
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11-20-03, 06:47 PM
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1E
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IP:
yeah i agree this was a decent enough drop, it shows you got sumthin for it.....look'n forward to hearin more....feeling makes reads stand out...i liked it...Pc...could you hit mine plz...
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