What Happened…

I remember when I first started, the works hardest
With no pad, no pen, no studio, how am I an artist
Started because I was bored, always felt ignored
Never knew my talent could open so many doors
First rhyme since I changed common to rhyme sense
Because my sights best when ever the fights next
Yet all this depends on what your mind pretends
Because what I come with is mightier than the pen
When I go I lose control like a plane with no pilot
The demand for flow makes this show often recited
Careers sighted, this is more than just a lame habit
It’s drastic how much rapping can make me an addict

What Happens…

Skip a few years, drink a few beers and move to wine
This is the last time I attend a record release party of mine
Why do I bother to spit these rhymes, yes the paycheck
I wish me and the stage never met, I often try and forget
The paper, the groupies, the beat makers, the movies
The mix tapes that spread like a disease, my first CD’s

What Will Happen…

State of euphoria, I regained the love for the game
The change I overcame, I have never felt the same
There is no more hesitation in my decisions
No more beads of perspiration in my vision
I devour scriptures to advance my word choice
Committed to change something with my voice
It’s all for the love, I’d rather barter than greed
Read what you sign, last advice you will ever need

If you started doing it for love…then it went to cash…
Get you special miseducation… And go back to the past...


Talon – The World Today
Av1r3x – Not Ya Average Chick
Auspicious – The Last War

tight 8.5/10

This was really good. You really have talent for this. God luck with all future endeavers!

Yeah i agree this was good...It made a good read like most of your pieces lol...But anyways the flow was pretty good for the most part i thought....your vocab was real nice in this....structure was good as always...overall i thought this was a good piece...keep at it...and keep dropping.

not much else to say other then this was tight. I always enjoy reading ur work so I guess that would make me a fan lol. but anyways nice drop bro everythings intact and on point. some good imagery of what it would actually be like and ur drop portrays it well. keep it up bro. peace.

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damn, i havent read your stuff in'a while but you really showed what you have as an artist in this piece great flow and lines i wouldn't critue nothing seemed perfect...i think if you had a catchy hook an put this in audio with a beat it wqiould be great...good drop man pz

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Open Mics
The Weathers Art
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108673
My Teenage Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104850
Secluded
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851
Open Your Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...461#post1157461

now it gets better...

1st verse is a struggling rapper...more flow than anything
2nd is commercial trash....its suppose to be simple
3rd is, my attempts, at underground type of rap...heavy into vocab

uppin
and thank you

why do i have to up this
where is my open mic voting ring?

fuck my voting ring is inactive
damnit...upping

its been a while, and i happen to like this piece

to the top

i liked it you havnt slowed down since we met and when you left omens you seam to have rekindled your original gift this is good and a note worthy read.

yea man this was Real good guess that why they call you The Realist LoL....Ok enough of the Corny Jokes lets Get Back on Topic...Ya Structure always seems to be good and I enjoyed ya flow in this one....Ya Vocab and Word Play a Good Made The Imagery All the more betta .....all aln all this was tight man Keep it Dropin Man...P.€.a.c.€...

ight... well props to start off...

i know it wasn't your best shit... but hell...it was hot
i like how u don't try n overwhelm with vocab.. nice n simple
the imagry was done well... i liked how this was done...
some catchy stuff in this...everything seemed worded good n all


There is no more hesitation in my decisions
No more beads of perspiration in my vision

^that was nice...

Careers sighted, this is more than just a lame habit
It’s drastic how much rapping can make me an addict

^both showed some good imagry...and depth

props

yo i was just clickin random open mics to drop my link for mine after replyin and readin when i clicked this one.....

i really enjoyed reading it...conveyed a good message and kept me interested with a good story, not to mention a skilled use of rhyming and word choice to protray a good tone of voice and message.... nice drop right here...

hit this up...? its a diss....different feel then this one..haha but w/e

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=99353

thank you all
up up and away