beat: to simon says by Pharoah Monch
(hint: look for wordplay boys n girls its all over the place)


From your odds.. im frightening, striking "lighting" at "thunder gods"/
hit "wonder spots" give "pleasure" and measure the "pressure" cause im "under lots"/
tribz be drillen lots of people, cuttin'em with ginsu type blades/
yall see me "killing off these faggots", just like "aids"/
i feel i deserve more of'your respect, the word warrior infects the text/
and next i perplex the story'your quest reflects/
my leathal spits, hits feeble kids, "demonic" tribs does "evil flips"/
and trips, smokes joints yall FEEL my POINTS like needle tips/
this paper's lead thurst has dispersed whats said cursed/
i cross center lines and ENTER MINDS "head first"/
i'll make all ya liquid rhymes bubble, and ya whole verse i'll boil it later/
you SIT and watch as ya SHIT gets WIPED OUT with lyrical "toilet paper"/
i bring pain with mad flips more insane then bad trips/
i SPEAK my MIND as if my brain had lips/
tribs flips eye lids with pride spits so hide kids
my "magic brain" plays "mind tricks" i'll make ya laugh til ya sides split/
roll the credits as i fedex genetics to medics/
i got speed like the ZX, "punchin" ya clueless im luis, Lennox/
for those who discove charms, fuck who finds luck?/
ya minds stuck, ya rhymes suck, and like "clocks on the ceilling" ya "times up"/
no wonder i put your lives under butcher knives- ya mouth im shutting yours/
cut with jutting swords, sliced on lyrical cutting boards/
the wieght of the world im stackin it with immaculent words/
let the track commits serves, attack and hit, smack and spit verbs, crack and split nerves/
tribs will try to defy "lips" and "eyes" that "spits" and "cries", who hits ribs'n thighs?/
"bounce off the boards" with "flips and dives", despise kids and lies the phatt'ness fits in size/
i hold COLD "pictures" in FREEZE "frames", my steez hails and reigns/
i keep ya "on track" like rails and trains,"hammer heads" like nails in brains/
when im lost i find the stakes(steaks), i marinate them with sauce and wine/
i'll stick a CRUSUFIX in ya brain so that i CROSS ya mind/
im defying others and steal tears from crying mothers/
like a "dead bird with blue and green wings" ya "passed with FLYING COLOURS"/(passed as in died)
check how the flow sounds, up the phatt'ness and grow pounds/
no slow rounds, fast punches each blast crunches ROOKIE verbs with PROnouns/
dont threat'n us, swear my lead and cuss, ya fled and bust/
i'll put ya in an urn-dead in dust, then bring "heat to eyes" and "burn ret-i-nus"/
follow my paths quest, my wraths best, tribz will laugh next/
and im strater than the lines on a dead mans polygraph test/(haha like that?)
i look at all obtsicles with intensions to try/
tribz'l "glove ya pupils" to do watever "catches your eye"/(baseball refrence)
whos the finest? ya wack kid, ive subtracted to munis ya back spit to leave ya spineless/
im iller then rippin ya "brain out of ya head" to leave mother fuckers "mindless"/
who spits and sprints, with fast rhymes'n trips with hints/
i "SPIT FIRE" as if my "saliva's gasoline" and my "lips were flints"/
now i got "thunder and lighting in my mind"-so let me "brain storm"/
leave a bruse in pain form, i was a new born with two horn's that remained warm/(saying im the devil)
"magically cutting" "wizards with scissors"im throwing projectiles/
i infect files, respect styles, as the mouth on my kneck smiles/
i love to "crack" nerves, never spit no wack verbs/
wanna see creativity? enips, aebatrev read those BACK words/(words are-spine,vertabrea)
most couln't triple my rhyme style if they wrote with three pens/
to many "expensive enemies" and cheep freinds, no shallow starts to my deep ends/
i poke and bother, choke ya collar, my SENSE broke ya DOLLAR/
yall "rub my rhymes in ya own face" like soap and water/

This was the best piece i have ever read on R&b had all the essentials punchlines metaphors creativity structure i give it a 10/10 keep spitting cause ill remember the name one

dont sleep on true art

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But this was a pretty good piece, long but it was good....the flow was pretty good i thought....Wordplay was nice it was real good....had some good multies....structure was alright could use a bit of work....overall i thought this was pretty good...keep at it and keep dropping.

i replied to loco, snakeeyes and C-Sections open mics

flow was there but all wordplay/meta's were played.
nice try tho... you got potential.

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