These are the ones i have hit up:

Muh Thugga
Brixton and Pedro Nok
Loco

This is my first open mic piece so obviously much room for elevation anyway here it is enjoy and feedback appreciated.




What is truth? As I take a moment trying to realize
I know it's self evident in mind it lies behind my eyes
The truth is good, but is good the foundation of truth?
It doesn't matter what takes place, just what can be proved
A misconception so common it is to easily believe the untrue
Atleast for me it is...and maybe you should too...
How the fuck would you react to getting stabbed in the back
A slap in the face and it was yours truly who did that
Imagine being paranoid constantly betraying yourself
Everyone foolishly believing that you excel in mental health
No wealth, thoughts are poor cuz you left sanity on the shelf
Collecting dust like all the questions never answered
Yet you walk around preaching a pseudo-intellectual mastered
Daring any foes to oppose knowledge you impose
Claiming an empire of I.Q. knowing shit no one knows
Ironically not knowing anything not even the fucking truth
But you're cool keeping it caged,...all smooth
You lose proving nothing you're just a fucking fallacy
So there is no truth? No lies? Insanity overruled reality

i thought this was good,
nice imagery,
decent flow,
nice vocab,

overall good drop,

keep it up

I tried to pm you to reply to what you said but your mailbox is full.clear it out.

cleared!

oh yeah for you readers who know a thing or two about literature
i hope you can pick up the alliteration and metas and all that good stuff

I tried to pm you again and it said your mailbox was full
clear out your sent pms aswell.

Not Bad.. Better Than Some Heads In Here..
Good Outlook n' Imagery Was On Point

HIt This UP
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...?threadid=93139

ok completly cleared now for sure!
haha i didnt know it kept the sent messages anyway thanks for the feedback yo

yeah good vocab and flow
it when off sometimes but not for long
good imagery and descriptions
nice shit dawg
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thanks man....anymore feed?

uppin for feedback...

This was a cool piece i liked the final four lines it was coolness nice job mang keep it coming 1..

Favorite Lines..

i thought this was a good read, ya flow and structure was good for most,..ya vocab was nice with some good imagery.....all in all pretty good.....

The truth is good, but is good the foundation of truth?
It doesn't matter what takes place, just what can be proved
^^^liked these lines...........

uppin for more feedback

aight...


this was a solid read....

flow-structure and all was normal no real dumb shit....multi's were not forced and put together in a concise fashion....liked it

concept-truth....well....i can say this is lackin a bit creativity....u coulda thrown in some twists and stray away from the normality that all "truth" works imply. but u kept the concept going from beginning to end without losing focus...good

lyrically- hmm...solid vocab...was nice and complex and quite thought provoking...<<spelling?.....anyway...this was a coo piece....there is room for improvement on the creative side but the meat of the process is there...keep it up

Yeah i agree this was pretty good....you structured this pretty well i thought nothing wrong there.....your vocab was real nice in this i thought as well......the flow was very good in that, didnt really fall off at all i thought...you had some good multies, i like those....content in this was good also....overall i thought this was a good piece, worth the read.

Tha Concept you chose to spit on is dope as fuck
you stayed on topic well i like your style too it's different to what i've mostly seen
if you want a tag team partner i battle in audio and text i'll hit you up in a pm aswell now

Peace

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