replied to red wun, deva, and skiddz

(hook)
what goes around comes around with twice the force-
but with rappers sounding like rappers you just seppeding the coarse-
and of cource-you wont get exposed by the source-
them some money hungry hoes so for doe there's no remoarse.
but think about it who sounds like who?
and if thats okay dont get heated when they sound like you!

it use to be me being me on the mic-
now i got to make sure im me.. not you when i write.
the industry is getting trife.
with so many carbon copies i have to copywrite my life-
Then notorize- my fingerprints,teeth,and eyes-
so I cant be sued or plagerized.
Now I got every wanna be tellen me to be original-
When your favorite m.c. is a dick riding criminal.
And I speak my mind so fuck being subliminal-
Im the gladiator maximus campaigning against the minimal.
The world full of scandalous, cats from ny to los angelas-
Example…. sample this-
MACE was traced by FABOLOUS-
And every want to be battle m.c. imitates or implicates CANIBUS.
JIGGA thought he was B-I-G-
But SHYNE beat him to the punch and sold NOTORIOUSLY-
cats diss him for authenticity-yeah it was fucked up on puffy maybe-
But what of the r-o-c? MEMPHIS and BEANIE-Add up to another of JAY-Z.
2PAC had KRAyZIE-
TAH was FREAKY but then weakly was remixed by the DIPSETS’ FREAKY deaky.
JAH had DMX then went for LL-
Now he PAC I gues he’ll never find himself but OH well.
This is whats considered all hype…syke.
EM must of bought OBIE TRICE-
for 50 CENTS cause that what he sound like.
I guess everything has a price…..That’s the extent-
SANTANS as bama as CAMRON… they both make no sence.
Who’s left?
Nah theres to many to bless-
Its easier if we cleared who’s cleaning the mess.
SAY NONCENTZ…..
cause Nas the last real nigga alive-
but im the last of the illest m.c.’s to survive.
See I stay this fat fucken arrogant smelly bastard.
And if you mimic me then you got the art of being pittyful mastered.
Im the greatest at self loathing cause I got skillz-
But in real life my clones look like they aids infected ill.
Is it real? No cause being real mainly used by the fake-
And I like to be original in a world of remakes.
Damn I guess now days if you wanna be the nicest-
You have to belive you’re the illest when your going through an identity crisis.

(hook)
what goes around comes around with twice the force-
but with rappers sounding like rappers you just seppeding the coarse-
and of cource-you wont get exposed by the source-
them some money hungry hoes so for doe there's no remoarse.
but think about it who sounds like who?
and if thats okay dont get heated when they sound like you!

uppin

that was tight man. i really liked the hook. the punches were ausome. some multies, the verse seemed alittle long though. overall a good peice though. thanks for hitin mine up too

thnks twin i appreciate that

pretty good shit son
liked the topic and the content
feel what ur saying...as usual some funny lines and serious in limbo mixed with some aggression
nice drop

THNX AND UPPIN FAM

still just as wack as alwayz...lol...j/k...keep doin' ya thing twin...the content as well as vocab were as expected from ya faggot ass...now reply to my new open mic and call me father...lol...

...WOW....
seriously...one of the best open mic's..ive read in a long motha fuckin time...

wordplay..was great...the vocab spiced it up...

u had everything goin in this piece..
trup props....

keep writin man...

good shit

peace

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Dope piece, flow and structure was good also you stuck to the topic
with tight vocab and wordplay....keep it up

Not too bad man, could work on spelling but thats about it. peace, peep my shit.

this was aight...^im not gonna say flawless like these guys..just honesty


flow-hmm...the structure was kinda sloppy...shit went off with a long bar followed by a short...had to rethink my strategy when reading....then i came up with a good flow...like the multi use...coo

concept-yeah...i just wrote something similar but with a completely different plot...so i liked it..haha....u spiced it up kinda sweetlike by throwin in all the rappers and industry status...really liked it.....u stayed with it and it came out pretty good

lyrically-this was kinda bumpy...it would get hot and complex to basic and kinda frail...overall lyrically it was solid..it evened up to normal status in my book and nothing really spectacular....

overall-good...concept nice....good focus on the topic and it ended up flowin nice.....peace


yo word-----can u please reply with constructive shit on my open mic in my sig???
i need good shit not just "hot" or "wack"...and i wanna join an open mic crew if u can mention my name anywhere if u like my shit aight.....peace...thanx

Yo, Keep up the good work man...All and all this was a tight piece, it needs a little work in some areas tho. I felt it was hard to read in some areas, The fact that you used the 'rap names' in your rhyme was tight but you shouldn't have used as many because it kinda fell off a little bit at the end. I really like your concept used, but like everyone says 'no ideas origional'. Seriously tho, good work and I look forward to reading more....

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yo man that shit was tight man! i loved the verse. shit was dope as fuck. you seem to get better an better. id like to collab wit you someday if you got the time. but faggots might hate on you for collabin witta no name like they did a while back. member that? yo keep doin yo thing and thanks for the input out on my INLUENCE piece. Peace!!

nice

YO ELEETE, FUCK WHAT THEY THIUNK IM HERE FOR ME AND TO HAVE FUN DOING WHAT I LOVE SO IF YOU WANT IN ON A COLLAB IM DOWN POP PM ME.
AS FOR THE VERSE NOW THAT I READ IT I CAN SEE WHERE MOST COMPLAINTS CAME FROM AND REWROTE IT TO FIX THOSE ERRORS.
IM GLAD MANY OF YOU CRITIQUED HARD ON ME CAUSE IT SHOWS ME WHERE IMPROVMENT MUST BE FOUND.
IM GLAD YOU READ IT AND ENJOYED IT AND MANY MORE WILL COME.