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Old 11-26-03, 02:26 PM   #1
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The Truth

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Sick of the crucifictions inside of this music business...
That leaves two defendants landed in court, due to a two-bit witness...

A rappers true description is not who they depicted to be...
Fewer listen to the real but base decisions on the convictions of me...

Picture the streets, I paint ghetto pictures, JJ Evans with a mic...
Figure the beef, wasn't left with sciptures an industry with no reverends to save my life...

Commercial artists work the hardest....Yea In being fake...
Don't see the mistakes that either will make they souls depleted and raped...
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Old 11-26-03, 03:50 PM   #2
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That's a good quick drop. but that's the problem it is very short but I feel you on what ur saying
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Old 11-26-03, 04:00 PM   #3
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thanks for the feed back

uppin for more..............

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Old 11-26-03, 06:04 PM   #4
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uppin for some more feed back

com on.......need some replys and opinons.......

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Old 11-26-03, 06:05 PM   #5
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This Was Decent
The Rhymes Were THere But The Structure
Gotta Go.. Get Sum Depth Into The Piece

Hit Any Or All oF These Up In Return
Forever
Dont Call
Before Your Gone
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Old 11-26-03, 06:17 PM   #6
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Re: The Truth

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Sick of the crucifictions inside of this music business...
That leaves two defendants landed in court, due to a two-bit witness...

Yo those opening lines...ill. I thought I was in store for a nice lil story piece.

A rappers true description is not who they depicted to be...
Fewer listen to the real but base decisions on the convictions of me...

Disappintment. No story. I still kinda like the angle you took on a subject that's gettin' a little played out in and of itself. Conscious rappers bitchin' about commerialism is almost becoming a cliche itself. But your lyricism is pretty dope.

Picture the streets, I paint ghetto pictures, JJ Evans with a mic...
Figure the beef, wasn't left with sciptures an industry with no reverends to save my life...

Yo, I think the flow's nice. You're using a lotta multies, and that makes the flow good I think.

Commercial artists work the hardest....Yea In being fake...
Don't see the mistakes that either will make they souls depleted and raped...

This shit was just a lil short. Would like to see where you go with it when you complete this piece. Ill drop though.
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