Replied 2:
Fuck Haterz - LM
fuck ratts - lyrical mobb
No More - Masta C

(Intro)
Watch me!

(Verse 1)
Look Beyond these bitches and Hoes
I was runnin into snitches and foes
tryna put some green in my momma's hand
da check better show 2 or 3 comma's man
that special gurl, I'm still searching, that elevation is wat I'm reachin
its a dirty world, all my past sins are still hauntin me n I'm screechin
do grown men even cry? been through wars, you hearin war cries
all a nigga do is get high, BITCH! look into this nigga'z poor eyez
you can see tha pain and tha tears, good old dayz are long gone
theres just been rain ova tha years, could Young J still go on
without slicin his wrist, leavin people cryin wit broken hearts
all this drama got me pissed, gotta pick up all of these parts
and put dem 2gether like Legos and rebuild life
I turned to MUSIC tryna lay flows and do right
just gotta focus and leave them hoes out of sight

(hook)
I came up on my own, everywhere I go dem niggaz sleep
look my talent has grown and I've been in it 3 years deep
had a mentor, was a student, 2pac was my main influence
when I write, its like he's teaching me instead of in ruins
I can only get better, and I can't stop still gotta improve
deliever tha hiphop luv letter, can't drop, gotta remove
my weaknesses and possibly turn it into one of my strengths
just watch me!

(Verse 2)
Every rapper has a hit, Every rapper has there time to shine
1 Hit wonders, can't nobody exterminate tha rhyme of mine
my mission, is to reach number 1 which is my main position
competition I squash it, Lyrically Blessed as a rap musician
I'm tryna live up to tha potential, that these niggaz see inside
I can never let Good and Evil, Whack and Dope eva collide
if I do I'm slippin off this rough slide where at tha top is tha glory
sometimes I'll take you on a ride with one of Jonny's past storys
Story Telling is what I do best, ain't that Battle, Freestyle type
I flow to slow beats to get shit of my chest, I'm unsigned hype
I'm not tryna get signed early cuz high school is before spitting
and even of this rap shit, leaves me stressed theres no quitting
theres only 1 option you have but I wouldn't want to do dat
Death separates man from what he loves, so remember that

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BEST OF YJ
Holla at cha Boi
Watch Me
Eyez of a Young Nigga

I like this a lot.
Flow and vocab was great and you promoted yourself really well. Just hope you were'nt lyin.
For most of this your structure was good but it fell off a little in some parts, thats the only thing that let it down.
Good drop

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HARRY R.I.P
1940 - 2002

In Respect

THIS WAS VERY HOT I GIVE PROPS

thanx uppin!

__________________
BEST OF YJ
Holla at cha Boi
Watch Me
Eyez of a Young Nigga

uppin dis joint

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BEST OF YJ
Holla at cha Boi
Watch Me
Eyez of a Young Nigga