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Old 11-29-03, 11:27 PM   #1
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fresh 2 da death

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hook:lil young nigga is da 1 they call young one...
i stay g-d up reid up from feet up.....
the one and only and da only one....

stayin fresh 2 death from da head and down.....
kep it fresh so clean like outkast now....
walking down brush off my shoulders.....
lookin in da mirror make sure i g-d up my clothes up....
always fresh 2 da death when im G-qued......
ice around my neck in my ears its jewled.......
no matta inside oustide both in and out.....
stayin fresh eir where i go is wat im a bout....

hook:lil young nigga is da 1 they call young one...
i stay g-d up reid up from feet up.....
the one and only and da only one....

fresh 2 death from hat 2 my sneakers....
hat ova my eyebrows cant see me and other features...
all around my neck its blinging2 my earings in my ears....
take da diamond out da blinging disappears....
stay fresh in da clothes mostly da black kind.....
in school walkin around grls say dat im dat fine....
gd-up so cool it a take yo breath....
young one right here always stay fresh 2 death
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Old 11-30-03, 03:57 PM   #2
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its if'y needs work but you got a style to you i cant hate.....
you are very simple and very repetetive in your words also not very complex i can see this as a west coast or south trackif thats the case you still need to be mor complex you got talent but dont troject it with simple content keep doing you i know you will do well here remember we all constantly elivate

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Old 11-30-03, 04:04 PM   #3
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Reply to three other open mics, and post links to your replies in this thread, or it will be deleted.
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Old 11-30-03, 04:14 PM   #4
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Its ok got a desent flow in some parts but it just dont seam to flow too good together
Keep practicing read back over your stuff and add an delete words. Too many words in a verse or not enough can kill your flow
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