I hold my breath for something new
I ain't coming through Yet i'm purple
I feel like i'm going around in Circles
Found to Merk all Solutions like Mud
Everytime I eat the same white Grub
I give my timmy that same Light Rub
B'cos it don't feel like i've eaten
After One-Weak I thought I was foreign
B'cos I Weak-Uned.. Then its More' dim
Every morning I was. . gently mourning
I found it so scourning. .
I wanted to be a Hobo
Just so I could get change
Treked the same terrains
Again & Again..
Then I remain..With the Same Old
With my Game Cold
Every Snowflake seems the same
I thought I Flipped my status
But the OldSame Gleems my Game
I'm Lost..
My LandLord wouldn't change my Lease
If I had one..
Just so I couldn't be Differ-Rent to peeps
I sadden..
Like discrimination of Asians in Chruch
Theres no Alter-Asian..I'm feeling hurt.
After I was wandering around
I was stumbling.. Yet unfound
But..
I'm pledging.. Maybe I'm a Ledge-End
Because I left this on a CliffHanger
Did he ever manage to LiftLanger!?

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YO this flowed very nice man , ..i was feeling some parts of ur verse very nice..some lines made me think twice, ..personal aspects in it, ..made it even more interesting, ..

My LandLord wouldn't change my Lease
If I had one..
Just so I couldn't be Differ-Rent to peeps
I sadden..
Like discrimination of Asians in Chruch
Theres no Alter-Asian..I'm feeling hurt.

Liked these lines , ..vocab fitted the concept..structure was nice, ....real nice read = ) ..

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This dsnt deserve to be slept on

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this had a very different flow. It took me a while to get the jist of the style but then I got it. I like the symbolic uses of words like alterations=alter-asians.

very nice

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