http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...8653#post968653
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...8667#post968667

Teacher listen, with a quick flick and slur of the tongue the speech is instant
Using this shyt and looked on as different but if there’s no such thing as Ebonics why is the word existent
Lost patience with lame kids, I’ll grow famous and tame wit’s to all that’s attacked with rap drainage
Facts plainest grasp maintenance, as I see the elderly whites be intimidated by this so called black language
Be honest,all though broken I still speak sonnets cause I grew up on it
Freed conscience spoken words haunted, who are they to tell me it’s wrong to use Ebonics
Aware of the consequences, but this represents where im from
Not dumb im locked in wisdom while a lot you are just emotional victims
Face the views of racist feuds I make my own options throw urs away and refuse to choose
Its simply rude you try and decipher the difference when your kind likes to use it too


dunno if this should even be considered a poem lol ..but uhh thats what i was going for i kinda fell off toward the end.. didnt feel like writing no more so im just going to post it now .:shrugs:. and of coarse i want some constructive criticism on it

I liked it.. flow was nice, and the concept was different. I like the last line. "Its simply rude you try and decipher the difference when your kind likes to use it too" .. because its true. Some white people use ebonics, and then others look down upon it. *Shrugs* Nice poem, none-the-less. Short, seemed like it was lacking... could have had more emotion, but good poem

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up for more critism i know i can get some on this one cause this wasnt all that great