replied to: HIGH_KU
Naomi
HARD_ONE


20 shots of power, 20 shots of pain// nothing getting better, shit still stays the same// 20 shots of power, 20 shots of pain// niggers try to rise but we all die from the game

my life is so hard to live in this life of pain
20 shots of power 20 shots of pain
cutting myself with a razor to see what pain feels like
every day is a hellraisor, from day to night
you never felt true pain to you've taken a nine
or u lost that special nigger clost to u, still a victim of tha nine
see nigger there no way of escaping death, we both black
nigger kills me, nigger killing me coz i'm black
aint neva gona change dat why most of my lyrics, u feel me
tragic killings and bloody killing an still ima not crazy
finally lernt to live with it and keep my glok loaded nigger
coz there aint no mercy in this game, wen ima against a trigger
holy god how ima gonna deal with these pain and shots
us niggers up against the world tilll are heart stops
ready to bust on these mother fucking crooked ass cops
only 1 thing left nigger, squeeze that glok!

20 shots of power, 20 shots of pain// nothing getting better, shit still stays the same// 20 shots of power, 20 shots of pain// niggers try to rise but we all die from the game

hullering get that money till i die, aaah shit
i still remain a victim of the game, life's a bitch
never beg for mercy coz i aint begging to keep my life
coz i never see myself with any kids or a wife
just money and my glok thats all i need till i die
see i've never witnessed love, everyday i fucking cry
do i lie, naah, i wish my mumma was still here with me
so she could take away the pain, an say she loves me
why do all these young kids die and get shot, tell me g
aint nothing but love, and peeps still wanna blow me
thanking my stepmother, coz she the reason i didnt take dat nine
from dat day,i've stayd focusd an now i got my money on my mind
all i wanna do these days is live life in the good way
getting high money but getting it my way
so i wont have to huller fuck the law no more
coz there be no reason to have to mourn no more

20 shots of power, 20 shots of pain// nothing getting better, shit still stays the same// 20 shots of power, 20 shots of pain// niggers try to rise but we all die from the game

i never thought the rap game would be so dangerous
when you start to ball, niggaz get so fucking jealous
see i dont take it to heart i just use my lyrics to unleash my anger
if a nigger chats shit, he dies by my mac nigga


i aint got nothing more to say, shits getting too emotional,

yeah this was ok man....your vocab let you down a bit here, and repeating too many words.....but ya structure was fine......hook was ok...didnt like the ending very much...jus didnt seem to fit...not the message though, the sylables.....up ya scheme though....add some mutlis and decent word play......but yeah not too bad man......keep elevating...pZ

Yeah this was alright here...your structure was ok, could have been a bit better though, you should try to keep the lines around the same length so it helps the flow out as well...your hook was alright i thought...vocab was alright, should be up'd though...but keep at it.

the struct was straight

dont put the "er" on the end of nigga

find more words to rhyme, too basic

topic was okay but u didn't cover it well

thaughts were hard to keep up with.

keep postin up, do