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This is a word heard with many meanings
Can bring strange emotions and estranged feelings
It can be physical or cause mental un-healing
Cos this word it has many meanings

The first form is when it fucks with ya brain
Turning normal cells to abnormal turning ppl insane
Like Schizophrenic’s shoot themselves then they’re the medics
Or murder hooker’s and blame it on someone named Derek
However, how much power its got,….
Driving and drilling the brain, the thoughts they don’t stop
Cos That’s the danger it’s masked with the average
It Could be you or me secretly wielding the savage
Lying dormant like the plague waiting, ready to ravage…

This is a word heard with many meanings
Can bring strange emotions and estranged feelings
It can be physical or cause mental un-healing
Cos this word it has many meanings

Perhaps the most potent is the psychotic
It’s like sticking ya fingers into a socket
These go out and observe her, follow then murder
Premeditated n un-medicated and take it one step further
Bury the evidence with irrelevance and wash of the blood
Once there clean the crimes washed away with the suds
They seem to crave it, this time doesn’t grow in their mind
Ya Born with it, its just a flaw in mankind
You’ll find them worldwide they haven’t got a certain look
So Watch ya back.. Cos there easily mistook….

This word has been heard with many meanings
It has brought strange emotions and estranged feelings
But can be admired or cause virtual-healing
With its one and only GOOD?? meaning

‘Some ill shit’ means ya writing good with respect
Getting feedback, due for writing with feeling on spec
Flowing talent on tap, reaching more than the members
Reaching the guests,.. “I might join in December”
So if ILL can mean good and translate to trauma or talent
Somewhere in the middle there’s a pivotal balance
A normal like me or like you.. Fucking Dehjahvous!
If I was you id watch my enemy my friends-
-my family and my crew, Cos the next victim could be YOU!!……

Wst feelint the concept, ..but u use a nice flow, ..and some nice vocab ..sometimes i got bored tho, for the rest this was ok .. =)

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Wasnt really feelin it but it wus aiight,vocab wus aiight,flow was nice,overall it wus a 6/10.....but keep it up n express ur mind more!!.........0n3

thanx for the honest feed..appreciated.....it was, a bit of a poor topic.......any more ppl?

i didnt really mind the topic
you had some nice wordplay, immagery, and vocab

but you do need to elevate a lil bit, at times in the piece i got lost.

but you do have a lotta potential.

aiight

peace

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thnx.......can i get some more feeback thrown over here.......pZ

This was alright here i thought....structure was alright in this...your wordplay was pretty nice in this, liked that.....vocab was good like usual...flow was ok, stayed on through out this as i read it....but overall this was alright...keep at it.