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lose your bitterness
englishgirl with raven hair remember the peacekeeper you once were before i sank my claws in deep remember the softness in your stride your feminine Caplet those delicate hands how quiet your spirit was before destruction arrived from the chrystalline pines reflect within your tiny rivers build fires in your garden burn a candle, just for flame forget about amsterdam - we didn't love eachother then forget the violence forget Canada forget that i once breathed for you but remember who you are do not become obsessed with material things do not find comfort in a bottle do not make money your god do not have selfish sex do not mess with one's head - you know that gets messy i write this, only to tell you that i still write for you although it is unseen and unheard i still have a voice i am still a vision scientist you know i have collected the pretty shiny memory of you and pressed it into me like a morphine kiss intoxicating and deadly - Twiz |
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The past (memories) can indeed devour you. Intoxicating and if too much, deadly.
Well that's what i got out of it anyway. In more ways than one. It was very touching. Seemed so 'sensitive' and...can't think of the word. Er...nope. It's gone. Can't remember. An emotional piece which seemed to leak out like tears...yet had such a poetic eloquence to it. Showing true your writing abilities. Intwining layers of irrationalaity, wisdom, raw love, logic etc (er, well kind of...me words aint coming to mind at the moment) Had a real yearning to it. Easily felt by even those who can't relate. I dig, man (I should wear flares saying that..oh wait, i am...or is that bootcut?!...er..sorry, bit off the point).. ...resp... Last edited by varentao : 12-09-03 at 08:13 PM. |
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Very nice!
Wow you pulled this off in seemless fashion. Words melted together and your points were well made. I loved the classic use of grammer and style, very appealing to the senses. As 'V' has stated above the poetic eloquence is amazing. I can see a stern message in it, but so respectfully assembeled. Great job, I can not emphasize that enough... ~Bounce~
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