http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=97593
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=97199
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=97882
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damn its been a minute since i've wrote anything but i felt like keying something up....i'm prolly rusty but o well....this was written to the 'renagade' beat...


i was born into this world not knowing my place
not knowing lifes lessons, that its about the give and the take
living as a kid everything felt great, not a care in the world
having fun everyday and feeling damn near immortal
hit adulthood and its a whole nother realm, a whole nother portal
its like a different dimension, full of nothing but the stress and the tension
life can change instant by instant, and leave you stressed and senseless
every step forward only feels like inches, like walking when everyone else is running
trying to perform miracles and come from nothing to amount to something
sometimes its to much to bare, the weight feels like its to much to share
questioning when i'm gone will i be remembered or will anyone care
is there anyone watching over me, is anyone there?....
growing older and feeling you've missed so much, things being left out
to the point were ya become a shell of yaself just from being stressed out
this is just the world viewed through my fucked up perspective
fucked up and wreakless, living life moment by moment, unlucky with a death wish
even though things can get hectic, i still love life and respect it
and i cherish every moment cause i'm not ready to exit
and i cherish every moment cause i'm not ready to exit......


hit me up wit some feedback

This was alright here i thought....structure could use a bit of a touch up though i think, lines were kinda stretched out there somewhat, try to keep them the same length though to help the flow out...flow was alright, could be a bit better i thought...you had some good multies in this, liked that...overall this was alright...keep at it.

thanks for the feedback, anyone else wanna leave some?

damn...deep $hit but i liked it, it's like ur puttin words to da way u feel when u think u missed so much in life already but still wanna hang on to it....

but i felt dat keep it comin

this was aiight the content was in and out with the topic and the flow wasn't that hot but the piece as a whole had nice scheme and was a pretty enjoyable read

thanks for the feedback, anyone else wanna leave any?