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Old 12-11-03, 02:51 PM   #1
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fuck what ya heard

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Most of you herbs write ya shit, this is an honest keystyle while waiting for my final grade

I'm here to throw Ratchets at the skull of you diseased Faggots just to Practice my insane killing Tactics/
Like perfecting my aim by shooting Backwards, and piercing ya heart/
to get my hand to hand right, i shadow box in the Dark/
And swing swords with my eyes closed so Sharp, that with one Cough they'll rip every limb they touch Apart/

oh well i was just getting started but teacher calling names!!!!!!!!!
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Old 12-11-03, 02:56 PM   #2
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tha first line was good wit all da multi's and shit, then it got shakky a lil, keep up tha better work

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Old 12-11-03, 02:57 PM   #3
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yeah i was gonna make the whole thing multies, but decided not to. appreciate tha feedback
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Old 12-11-03, 02:58 PM   #4
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You need to leave 3 links or 3 names of people you left feedback to or this will get closed..

This was ok.... make this a little longer so we can give you better feedback on things...also try not to make your lines not so long cause it takes away from the flow of your piece...but keep at it.
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Old 12-11-03, 03:10 PM   #5
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I hope you get good graes.. you aint' cutting it as a rhymer for me.. this was really quite basic.. I know it was a keystyle.. But even then its still average.. Stay Up blud

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Old 12-11-03, 04:21 PM   #6
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Turning the world on its side so i can 'lay it down' and Climb/
Stole everybody's watch and threw em behind me to prove even though i'm 'ahead of it' its still 'my Time'/
So whenever referring to me i refuse to be considered Hot/
With the proper heat anything can warm up on the Spot,and that in no way does the justice to the talent i Got/
burried my bike chain in the grass to prove i got the 'underground on Lock'/
Understand it, hot is a time relative Term/
With a few world Turns, something is safe to manhandle that once would cause skin to Burn/
Even the Sun's Burn is less tragic as it once was, years ago it could burn away Disease/
The hottest Fire, when confronted with Ice will lose Degrees/
And i'm timeless like broken Watches, and trashed Swatches/
battling any of the million plus students in any College with a flow thats Nostalogic to make unseen Profits of respect, admiration and Knowledge/

another unwritten, that is better then most of ya'll shit that takes ya'll 6 days 2 write

links=http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?s=&threadid=97834

and http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=97834

Last edited by Gunman tha Great : 12-11-03 at 04:38 PM.
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Old 12-11-03, 04:27 PM   #7
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Stole everybody's watch and threw em behind me to prove even though i'm 'ahead of it' its still 'my time'/
So whenever referring to me i refuse to be considered hot/
With the proper heat anything can warm up on the Spot,and that in no way does the justice to the talent i got/



That shit was ill L.G. Nice work. You never used multi's really, but these are gett'n good.

I'd like to say somth'n tho about Mr. Pot1ent. Your names Gay. Your Avs Gay. Your Sigs Gay. Your reply was gay. and ....well.....do the math.
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Old 12-11-03, 04:57 PM   #8
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lets up this cuz my head hurts
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