http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=98144


comin thru is ill prophets, flo's so chokin it'll have u still coffin, always movin da crowds, ain a thing as still moshpits, spit so hard an ill, even will loves it, [[ill will]] yall niggas talk to much so we kill gossip, got beef, u kno we will leave u fucked kid, our attitudes juss fuck itt....

ya kno saint got dat authentic flo/ y yall posers keep postin, pretendin ta flo/ im juss defendin yall yo, ders gotta be a reason ta ya wackness/ or maybe not, yall juss lack skills/ to go afta me, yall gon need more den practice to come an attack dis/ slip my drink wit laxatives, an den maybe my shit'll stink/ an maybe if i go onto a crack binge/ it'll fuk up my mind leavin de door open so u can stikk ya feet in/ othawise da godd's good, stick ta readin/ my bars, i spit rhymes wid spiritual features/ i prophesize, do more den focus on typical teachings/ im lyrically preaching, each verse is like a bible scripture/ i don kno wuts witchya, im an apostle/ etchin out gospels, like luke, mark, john an paul/ words neva lukewarm, always hot on da chart like sean paul/ i gets bizzy, yall get gittery/ erytime u see da saints name, ya body shiverin/ if yall was livin in, my life, yall wuda alreddy givin in/ dats y i gotta act out on these boards an split bitches/ like yall, eat ya shit, an wash it down wid a glass of piss/ yall like wite sitcoms on UPN, cancelled quick/ i clench my hand to fist, but yall dont want war, yall pacifists/ yall scared cuz i've masterd dis/ ya kno i'll leave yall lookin like bitches fake bakin, gettin cancer quik/ all red an shit, yall gay fags be like lil kim, always got ya hands on dicks/ im da master spitter, yall juss da master pricks/ get on yuh knees, bou down ta saint, da most handsome kid/ got all de biches lovin me, wantin ta comfort me, cuz dey undastand im da shit/ im above dis, proof cuz im holdin rapbattles hostage, ain givin it up, I stand wit posture, therefore there is no ransomin/ all yall is juss fans of kidd...[[das me]]

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..notiq..

stucture could use some work and stretch ya flows out a little bit and youll be alright dog

Holla at em

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<marquee>FUCK YOU!!! YEAH YOU BITCH</marquee>

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slept on battle
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=105181
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=113861

You ned 3 links or 3 names of people you replied to or this will get closed..

But this was ok....structure could use work like Killa said...dont put it in paragraph form, it makes it hard to read for some people, and it throws the flow off...put it line on top of line and make them around the same length so it helps the flow out...also add some multies...but keep at it.