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9 O'Clock
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Look me in the eye and tell me what you see
Is it countless novels of fully wasted fantasy? A broken hearted demon hardly lusting for his harmony? Or a simple waste, another blind man's grey photography? Thinking harder, more than twice Thinking bad thoughts, thinking nice Guess my friend now, please guess once more What was this mad place created for? What is life, and what is not? Are you happy with the life you got? Put down that glass orb and crush it to shreds Predicting the future only works on the dead Spinning and turning, we're loosing our heads So anxious and helpless, global newly-weds Where does it end? When does it end? How will it end? Some hate the Hizbollah, some hate the Jews But we all love the bloodshed On the nine o'clock news Some say they are helping, while others actually do But still they close down the whole damn hospital Until the massacre is through You looked me in the eye, let me tell you what you saw A bruised up old dimension where all food is eaten raw Nothing ventured, nothing gained, undigested, all insane Murder's justice, pleasure's pain, but you can't make out my name What do you figure, that I'm trying to say? That it won't stop, even on the brightest day? Or am I thinking, thinking all of it's new? No, I am thinking you should think some more too Where does it end? When does it end? Why should it end? It's the nine o'clock news Yes it's nine o'clock soon... Last edited by Slik Shadow : 12-14-03 at 04:26 PM. |
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this was a nice concept and you pulled it off nicely in terms of meaning and flow... but you need vocab and multi improvement... it was very short, but for the most part, you delivered....
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IP:
that was mad boi...i really enjoyed reading it....nice flow beutifully written but yea...i g2g to school so i'll write more when i get home....
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Sharp Perfection.
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its there without doubt every day on the news, some horror, blood shed, something put out there to scare us, to make ppl want to stay locked in their homes, but yet it almost seems that ppl thrive on it. Your message was a good one, and you put it out pretty simple and clear. With good emotion. you showed us where you stood, and why, made me think about what you were getting across. i think you did a good job on this piece, keep posting.
check out some of my ~Tera~ DONT HATE
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IP:
nice one man i liked it
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