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12-15-03, 03:42 PM | #1 | |
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[Born To Kill Diss.]
IP:
You've achieved nothing nothings achieved
Flip it anyway you wanna, Its still percieved Do you con-scede? Your wife ain't pregnant Like oranges, i'm cutting you into segments He's offering anal so kids are more into him Does he rap with hair? Your lines in-fringed BornToKill's checking every tortoise he sees He lost his hare Your also a pathetic emcee Genetic men see him as lover.. Your brother Is coming for you.. But does he take cover? Doesnt mind me holding him against his will You leave ass.. So he's also leaving his skill Yet nothing much... BornToKill's loving butts Like little kids who smoke, but can't light up Want to try your luck? Then try the 84 wins I'll wipe them clean like a preist to your sins Born To Kills more boar-ring than a Pig Pen Hes had alot of time something like Big Ben You lived when armstrong visited the moon Now 34 years later.. Its only limited to you Out of the Blue, Came you wanting ' black ' Raps, I'ma flip this and give you raps back So your black and blue Stacks are Through Christmas Bonus? Nah another Jenga due Did someone Wenger you? Come from lows Right to the top so your shitty mouth blows Tear you new holes Just too watch it scald His lifes ' lows ' so is his ups being ' slow ' So did you find that tortoise? or your hoe When you soon dye Everyone Will Rejoyce No wills voiced, I told you..... Your Nothing Born To Kill will have to commit suicide too Keep his name true. BLAH - All the oldies have left the site.. Toodle Doo |
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12-15-03, 04:02 PM | #2 | |
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IP:
Your closer was quite nice brother, but, it seems as if on some points you opted to finish off the bar with a line that just rhymed with the other one.. and really didnt have that much meaning behind it. Maybe you should go a little shorter? anyways..
good job my man. |
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12-15-03, 04:08 PM | #3 | |
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IP:
very nice closer... your structure...once again... was impeccable...
still liked to know how you do that... but your wordplay was aight... coulda used more... your punches were ok... but your flow was damn nice... this was a pretty good read here.... props ~AshY~ |
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12-15-03, 04:44 PM | #4 | ||
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IP:
Thanks for taking the time to put this together...
Great structure and flow. Nice ass multi's. So-so punches throughout... But ya closer was tight, uh-huh. Pretty good verse... I'll work on some kinda return. I like how Open Mic is getting used for dissing... Pretty cool, yes it is.
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12-15-03, 04:49 PM | #5 | ||
Word.
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IP:
You need to leave 3 links or 3 names of people you left feedback to or this will get closed. Thanks.
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12-15-03, 05:51 PM | #6 | ||
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IP:
the finisha is mad nice bruvva.......
its a gud punch and a personal...nice other than that, tha punches weren't that great.... it was a good verse and read with a gud style..... multis were used well and the vocab was tight.... flow was little off but it was a good read stay up playa...........................................pe ace |
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