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Old 12-17-03, 05:32 PM   #1
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CORRUPTED VISIONS:Christmas Thieves

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What im-talking bout are those who take advantage of situations
Frail women house bound with limitations
Getting looted, left lonely scared not caring for Christmas fest
It’s fucked up, I confess, but goes on none the less
Most detest this and feel ashamed of society’s small section
That destroy the festive season stealing presents and possessions
Hard work wasted, scraping by, what for, for nuthin..
Shattered kids, parents coping with the minimum un-cushioned
Single moms, no husbands no money to buy more
But thieves don’t think like that, they just craving a score
‘Merry Christmas’ many wish this, but unfortunately miss out
I doubt the victims wake on the day and scream and shout
But the kids of the aggressor receive gifts but from others
Strangers, their mothers and some fucker’s brothers
They know no difference, but the parents looking down
Must realise the happiness, laughing with presents lying round
So surely they understand the reverse its far worse
No laughing or toys, jus broken ppl sitting missing with hurt……


jus a quick verse......pZ
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Old 12-17-03, 06:07 PM   #2
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This was a pretty good drop here i thought...your structure in this i thought was alright...flow was pretty good, it stayed on through out it i thought....your vocab was good in this like it always is lol...but overall this was pretty good...keep at it.
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Old 12-17-03, 07:34 PM   #3
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this was a good drop...stayed on topic...good wordplay,vocab, n good structure...can be easily read n evrything so overall...nice drop...keep at it

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Old 12-17-03, 10:48 PM   #4
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yea i agree masta this was a good read...yea ya structure seemed a bit different and it was Alright....ya vocab is allways decent never really that simple and i think that its one of ya strengths..ya FLow was Nice stayed Straight On and seemd to Be nicely worked....all and all i was glad to see Corrupted Visions On Ya Title and It was Nive read ya Used ya Topic well man....P.€.a.c.€....
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Old 12-17-03, 10:53 PM   #5
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my fam still ripping consitant yo hit me for a damn collab cause we slippen going solo non stop
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Old 12-18-03, 05:17 PM   #6
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thnx ppl...an Word, im up for that collab you right, its all solo at the min....lets address it...aight...pZ
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Old 12-18-03, 05:34 PM   #7
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...Hmm..Nice..it was an easy read...which is hard to find these days...with all the bullshit...keep up^^
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Old 12-18-03, 06:16 PM   #8
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yeah thnx... i was trying to keep it easy on the eyes......any more...pZ
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