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had to burn one first by CrackaBox187
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I really don't know what to say about holidays
What can I say? You can go broke in many ways
and what about the children's toys the fuckers take?
they won't have a Christmas... Instead they'll have a wake
Their souls will be killed with the criminal's eye
santa cap, red coat, and beard... they'll be disguised
she has cancer and he thinks he's the cure
Prancer and Dancer will be the escape car
they run into the air... the North Poles not far
Fucking sick psychos want to lcik her fucking clit
I want to kill this man's sick holiday spirit
My Christams will be a little different
I'll get all the shit I want in the Christmas morning minute
My fucking grandparents will come and share the joy
My grandpa will pop a C-note to show me
He'll ask me to come to Florida... but I'm not going
I'll tell him I'm a rapper... I'm not really flowing
Will I ever make it? There's no way of knowing
I'll just write a sick Christmas rap
kind of like the Simpson's version of Poe's Raven rap
that is the illest show ever.........
I loved it whne Bart went on his stealing video game endeaver
I know that I could use a slick leather jacket
or for Anthony to ask me out..... he's such a faggot
Go rape yourself, you penis wanting Em wannabe
I don't know what else to say
Merry Christmas and Happy Holidays

Interesting little rhyme...

Pretty simplistic, was much better in the first 6 lines.

Something fell apart after that and you got kinda silly and went for shock value.

But, you used some funny Simpson's references which helped with your imagery.

Overall, eh.

But a 5.25/10 Holiday eh.

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...I'm tired of x-mas..shit ain't even here for another week!!!!...your shit was wack!!!!....^^

^ lmao .. true. do you guys not know of internal rhyming / multi's / syllable structure / couplets / transition / writers voice?

apparently not. I could key verses better than this was wrote = /

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semi-original, but gay

yeah..think you spend too much on ya topic...it was ok...but seemed like you jus lacked on everything else very simple scheme....so took away from the read.....where are the multis n shit........work on it....pZ