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12-18-03, 06:57 PM | #1 | ||
Nigga Ima OG.
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Rap Created In 7 Days - the Journal of the Creator.
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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=99624
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=99394 http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=97001 Day 1, I lurked from the shadows lyrically Sprinkled a beat, and decreeded that the world shall vibe Cause all of a mind kind, will be lifted off there seat Emcees only spit about what they knew of Never bit, nor recycled - they were idols Ravishly, i listened to what I had created, and went to sleep. Day 2, I rose, i saw aprentices' and was finally satisfied There was no 'stab a bitch', just a lyrical gift I then created the flow of the movement I cyphered a rap, pulled out a mic, and was dissapointed It rhymed - but there was no internal rhyming I sighed, and went to sleep. Day 3, I rembered the past, and created "multis" at last~ *pause* I wrote up some lyrics, and the crowd was in awe, I was the only rapper they saw, so they wouldnt know wat to judge Again I was disapointed, so I revelaed my next plan To create another rapper - yes, "Man" He came from fan, to a future Emcee - then I slept. Day 4, Man was created, we squared off in a battle Hearts began to rattle, but - we both choked I hoped it would be the greatest thing seen But he came from a rap phene, to on the t.v screen He didnt know what he was doing, so I gave him lyrical powers He devoured the hours, and rapped.. I was satisfied and slept Day 5, I created the rap bible, the 10 rap-commandments Cats began to establish there ability, consoled skill more then me Rap became all Ganster, the old days were over I was dis-pleased at all these miss-deeds I ordered a mandatory council meeting They handed it tword me, and removed me from power. I didnt sleep that night. Day 6, The sacred rap manual was tworn up They had free will, and used it, scorn the name I was sickened by the fake thugs, and fake rappers It stackered daily, coming from suburbs claming hood Bothered me, so I made an underground rap decree The rejects,the gangsta,the real,my "family" I slept that night.. Day 7, Rap has become commerical, accept for the underground It holds the same sound, yet more meaning Yet more deciving, you came from the boddom - the top Thats when niggas stopped reppin' they block Popped and opened the casket, I grabbed my mic ~ *pause* And slammed, and said "ALL FAKE WILL BE STATIC" I slept fine that night, because - rap was now saved.. I then engraved the commandments, the underground is now established.. |
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12-18-03, 07:07 PM | #2 | |
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damn i liked this alot i never seen your work this is a first and i admit im impressed. every aspect was illness and i see great things in your future
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12-18-03, 07:23 PM | #3 | ||
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thanks, any good criticsm coming from you is much appreciated..
peace
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12-18-03, 07:25 PM | #4 | ||
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upping
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12-18-03, 07:28 PM | #5 | |
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yeah i was feelin it.........creative way to express your topic too.....
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12-18-03, 07:32 PM | #6 | ||
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thanks.. upp
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12-18-03, 07:56 PM | #7 | ||
Word.
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Yeah i agree this was a good piece here....pretty creative at that...i liked it overall...it made a pretty good read i thought...vocab in this was good i thought....flow was alright....but overall this was a pretty good piece...keep at it.
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12-18-03, 09:25 PM | #8 | ||
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upp peep this right here...
then peep a diss i just dropped http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...=&postid=999252 ight holla peep this tho
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12-19-03, 12:17 AM | #9 | |
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youve got a unique flow and all your aspects are pretty well-done... the concept has been used before though, by Canibus... but u did it in a different style, and in a different way... you stayed on topic, so props
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12-19-03, 01:33 AM | #10 | |
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yo i really liked this peice right there. its a good protrayal of the history of hip hop music with its rise and fall and ressurection of good hip hop in the underground scene. good idea. i like the sleep repition thing...very createve nice job.
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12-19-03, 01:51 AM | #11 | |
Fuck You, I Rhyme Better
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ohh my god...this is classic
i dont think most of the guys above me caught the inner concept behind this.. the evolution of rap and the MC...i must say this piece is a favorite of mine already legend? im gonna try |
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12-19-03, 01:07 PM | #12 | ||
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thanks man i appreciate the good replies
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12-19-03, 01:13 PM | #13 | |
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This wasn't legendary, was good though. Nicely written. Had a few minor flaws, lack of multi's, some awkward wording, writers voice wasn't that well directed at points .. decent read though.
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12-19-03, 01:16 PM | #14 | ||
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thanks for the reply...
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12-19-03, 02:20 PM | #15 | ||
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...I like the creativity..you get props on that alone...overall it was well written..keep up...^^
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