sorry for postin that shit on here MOD....i didnt read the rulez properly....

Even If itz 'online'.. i'll 'spit-fire'.. and 'toast-biterz'//
I think I got the 'sixth sense'.. I can sell all ya 'ghost writerz'//
I cheat 'love'.... and 'burn cupid'//
I know 'smart-chickz' who give me 'brainz'.. til they turn 'stupid'//
Now watch az I switch my style like fashion modelz//
Smashin bottlez filled with all my cash from lottoz//
I rock 'flurescent-condomz' when i fuck these ho chickz//
so come over here bitch and sit on this 'glow-stick'//
I ain't braggin'... but my shitz so damn big//
the last ho that 'deepthroated' it... broke a fuckin' 'rib'//
All jokez aside... I fuck shortiez... No big footz..//
Cuz the smaller the chick iz.. the bigger my dick lookz//

yo..i was in a funny mood so i though id spit somethin like this....what y'all think...

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You need to leave 3 links or 3 names of people you left feedback to or this will get closed, Thanks..I know you posted but leave the names in here or it will get closed.

But this was alright i thought....structure was ok, could use a touch up in a few spots though but it was still good.....flow in this was pretty good, stayed on point....you had some good wordplay i thought...but overall this was alright...keep at it.

i gave feedback on.....

ThaYOcutee, Crackbox187, Ak-Mixa and Sand....

thanks for the critz......its appriciated

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i agree this was strong but needed touch ups the structure maybe your style of spitting but many punchlines fell to seimple need a lil more complexity

aight son.....thanks for takin your time to reply to this......peace.

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..I'm not really feeling this piece..I don't know really know why??maybe I'm just Dumb????..LoL!!!!

I couldnt really catch a steady flow I mean at times it was there but then it like faded and shit ......................keep it up though and vote at this battle ::::http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...threadid=100437

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