hey yo, this my version hellbound,
hope y'all like it,
tell me what u think of it aswell.



Hellbound



Is this hell we’re living in?...if it is…heaven’s definitely got to be better…
But it looks like we’re Hellbound….Whatever man,
Lets go down.

Shut up, don’t talk to me, I hate you,
Stay out of my way or I’ll beat you,
Rip the skin of your belly and eat you,
Cause when I get hungry ill eat any thing and anyone,
Everyone else is too scared to do what I’ve done,
And if I have to, ill take a chunk out of your bum.
I’m not that sick,
First of all, I’ll take your flesh with other flesh.
Place them on a stick,
(LOOK EVERYBODY, DINNER FOR EVERYONE, JUST TAKE YOUR PICK).
There would be no point in you having a funeral and a casket,
There would only be enough of you to put in a basket.
You might as well get cremated and only fill up to the top of a cup,
Now you know what I’m capable of,
So shut the fuck up!


Chorus x2
I see the light at the end,
But every time I take a step, it gets dim,
Tell me is this hell with living in?
If so, heavens got to be better,
But if we’re hellbound, whatever lets go down.


Everyone place your bets its about to get wild,
0800 bla blab la is the number to be dialled.
Which person is about to be killed?
And which person blood is about to be spilled?
I can guarantee its not going to be me,
Its one of these to dickhead it’s going to be.
I’m like Arnold Schwarzenegger,
I’m fast, strong and way fucking bigger,
Or I just pull out the Uzi or the Mack 10,
Stick it in your face and pull the fucking trigger.
You why I’m going to win and there going to die?
Cause I’m keeping it real and that what nobody can deny.
So it’s time for the both of you to say goodbye,
Cause I’m about to blow your fucking body apart
And watch it fly through the sky.

Hellbound (continued)

Chorus x2
I see the light at the end,
But every time I take a step, it gets dim,
Tell me is this hell with living in?
If so, heavens got to be better,
But if we’re hellbound, whatever lets go down.


I’ll tell you one ass I would like to fucking kick,
Would be that fucking Norris off Coronation Street.
He’s a prick.
He needs to shut the fuck up,
He does my fucking nut.
Stay the fuck out of people business; it’s not for you to know,
I’m gonna come to Manchester, shoot you in the head with a fo-fo,
And separate your legs from your torso.
From now on I’m gonna kill anyone I hate,
And rape every sexy girl after we’ve been out on a date.
Kill them with a big blow to the cunt,
And at the end, I’ll smoke a big fat blunt.
I’m gonna keep on doing this every first of the month.
Now that’s what I call a good fucking stunt.

Chorus x2
I see the light at the end,
But every time I take a step, it gets dim,
Tell me is this hell with living in?
If so, heavens got to be better,
But if we’re hellbound, whatever lets go down.

I fucking….I fucking Rule….Mother Fucker,
2k3…Russie Lloyd….peace…..BITCH!
(Beat fades out)



aite tell what u think
laterz

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Mc_Russie

You need to leave 3 links or 3 names of people you left feedback to or this will get closed, Thanks.

But this was ok.....structure in this was alright, it needs some work though, try keeping your lines all around the same length so its structured good and so it helps out the flow in your pieces....also try adding some multies....but keep at it.

aite, cheers for that,
ill c what i can do lo


plz if ne other ppl read plz leave sum comments about my song.

cheers, laterz

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Mc_Russie

6/10

yo
it was good,
flow was aight, i couldn't find my hellboud song, so i kinda forgot the beat to it, so i don't really know whether or not it kept to it.
But yeh i liked it, sounded pretty good going through my head.
and you kept on topic which wa good
anywho that's all i got to say abou that!
i give it a 7/10
peace fo real