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Old 12-26-03, 05:14 AM   #1
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..WheN faith GroWS.. (RB introduction)

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aight this was one of my latest drops on PR, but my crew moved over here so ima just paste it for yall to read

drop some feedback, and links and ill get at u... btw i replied to velocity and some other kats cant remember their screen names.


As I reach for my nine, I plant a blind seed and watch it reach for the sky...
It takes more than water to keep this alive, it works its ass off and sleeps in my mind..
And as I'm reading the signs, I see it's got no ladder, it just believes it can climb...
There's no other tree of it's kind, for every breath it takes the number of leaves will decline..
Just as for every true lesson taught, it takes a fuckin teacher to die...
And right now it's wearing thin, from a fucked up life and childhood of bearing sins..
Throwing chairs and bins, gettin in street fights cos nobody ever cared for him...
Life was never fair for him, but if life ain't fair then fuck I guess God's a cheat..
Though i'm off the leash, too poor to reach the rich and too proud to rob the cheap...
As I shop for feet to get a solid footing, i'm glad to have seen through the day..
And as I'm leaving to pray, I realise that the seed was just the seed of my faith...

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Old 12-26-03, 12:00 PM   #2
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you need to leave 3 links or 3 names of people you left feedback to or this will get closed, Thanks...I know you said you left feedback but leave the names, Thanks.
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Old 12-26-03, 03:29 PM   #3
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damn this was ill
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Old 12-26-03, 11:01 PM   #4
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I replied to "Past his Prime" so now im upping this

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Old 12-26-03, 11:07 PM   #5
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nice...but another one....you could fix a bars to make em shorter...i unno it's just not my taste, but content was nice...everything pretty much on point

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Old 12-27-03, 09:49 AM   #6
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Old 12-27-03, 02:51 PM   #7
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tight shit man... can we vote det the illest open mic of the month allready?
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Old 12-27-03, 08:27 PM   #8
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yere it was aight- elivate and u could be dope
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Old 12-27-03, 08:49 PM   #9
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wasnt bad. sorta got lost in itself. keep elevatin...
check my shit if y'all can...
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Old 12-27-03, 11:47 PM   #10
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thanks yall.. but elevate? i dont see anybody dropping any better shit in this forum lol

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Old 12-29-03, 10:23 AM   #11
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[color=blood red]You Must Be Crazy....[/color]
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Old 12-29-03, 10:40 AM   #12
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ahaah fo sure............crazy like shady. We all need to elevate lol...
some nice sh*t keep tit tup, falow an structire needed a lil polish, wordplay also, but overall about average.........................peace im out.

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Old 12-29-03, 10:44 AM   #13
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..????????..it was alright..it's nothing 'new'..I don't know what all the 'fuss' is about..
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Old 12-29-03, 11:46 AM   #14
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Verse seems to be a little stretched, but it flowed nice. I think ya did a good job on it....
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Old 12-29-03, 11:56 AM   #15
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this was far from the best open mic of the month.....it was ok...but you still really need some elevation....and dont get too cocky on this site...you might get shot down by a cockier vet

no hate just elevate......i give this a 7/10 tho
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