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12-27-03, 12:03 PM | #1 | ||||
Straight Savage.
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Wanting Eyes.
IP: 8BEC CACE
She looks and notices people who wouldn't do the same
People who find something else, People with no shame She walks the street, family beside her, she's in the front Recognition only talking to the others, making it so blunt She just stares, wanting whatever her brother recieved Her soul in need, wanting eyes of people ever so Direly But she can't recieve information into relative thoughts Her Mind painting pictures she hoped her eyes caught She knows nobody's looking, but she still wants to see The colors of vast control, looking for pictures to recieve She stands, cane in hand, for the people to try to find That though they think she can only see darkness She knows what she sees, perhaps the people are blind He journeys his everyday adventure outside of his door Wearing something outrageous, from his set of clothes Maybe something thats noticeable, the colors on brink Or maybe the threads in his clothes, that no longer link He only calls for things, That he recieves so negatively Attention he doesn't get, that he calls for so desperately He thinks he's the life of every single thing thats happening His clothes, his attitude, for your eyes that he's grasping Maybe its the fact, That his father was never really there That he abuses what he gets, And always overpays his fare But you see, He can't see what the other townsfolk can see Is that a disgraced person... Who wants the people to see what he wants them to see What brings these two together, is that they both realize They are wanting eyes, one to see, and one to see eyes One wants to know what her world is like,curious to explore And one wants the eyes to see, until from his antics are sore One needs them to see, what colors seem to fit her world Though she needs to realize, she's perfect, perfect as can be She doesn't need the attention, just realization that she needs While he needs to know, that he craves too much for himself people are telling themselves, this boy is way too full of Himself He has the eyes of attention, Just not the one he wants He needs the eyes of other, Because He broke the ones he got
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12-27-03, 12:31 PM | #2 | ||||
Straight Savage.
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IP: 8BEC CACE
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=101604
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...15&pagenumber=2 http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=99846
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12-28-03, 03:31 AM | #3 | ||||||
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IP: 4CFB 9C60
this is nice man....ya structure was off the Hook and ya FLow Man Amazing............But getting Off that it was Pretty Nicely Done ya Vocab was Good ya Wordplay was betta Made the read Betta to....can't say much for the topic....But it was Good keep doin yall THing....Peace....
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12-28-03, 10:17 AM | #4 | ||||||
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IP: 009D 91CF
yeah that spit were pretty hot, fa'low were sweet an structure were packing heat dawg......
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12-28-03, 10:39 AM | #5 | ||||||
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IP: 477E 6B1C
good rhyme structure ....ya flow was easy 2 follow....had a strong story....a few filler lines..but definitely a good piece...
ima have 2 give dis 1 2 thumbs up... |
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12-28-03, 11:09 AM | #6 | ||||
Straight Savage.
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IP: 8BEC CACE
Up
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12-28-03, 12:02 PM | #7 | ||||||||
Flyweight
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IP: E7CB E3DC
nice drop homie.......ur vocab,wordplay,structure, n rhyme was all tight as fuck son...keep doin ur thang...overall this drop was fire son...
Peace
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12-31-03, 04:57 PM | #8 | ||||
Straight Savage.
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IP: 8BEC CACE
up
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12-31-03, 10:29 PM | #9 | ||||||
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IP: 8AB2 5FC3
this was good, had a good flow, sounded like a poem sorta, anywayz, keep spittin
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01-01-04, 12:50 AM | #10 | |||||||
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IP: DE17 B514
hey nice drop...good flow keep it up!!
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01-01-04, 12:51 AM | #11 | |||||||
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IP: D0CB 44B2
hell yeah man I thought this shit was hott as fuck!!!! Good structure and good flow..........peace homie...........keep spittin.
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01-01-04, 01:43 PM | #12 | ||||
Straight Savage.
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IP: 8BEC CACE
coolio,thanks for replies
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01-01-04, 02:38 PM | #13 | ||||||
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IP: C1DA C961
dis was hot, at first i thought it was about
a golddigger but da second verse cleared me up keep at it man peace |
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01-01-04, 02:40 PM | #14 | ||||
Straight Savage.
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IP: 8BEC CACE
A gold digger?
OK, however you see it.
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01-01-04, 02:43 PM | #15 | ||||||
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IP: C1DA C961
awsome shit, structure impectable, wordplay the shit, keep up
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