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Old 12-28-03, 03:06 PM   #1
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Imagin a world without hatred and sin,
Imagin a free world and beauty can begin,
Take a leaf out this book and realise whats happenin,
This worlds expressions are being released through rappin,
Lets stop this murder and so called angry bitch slappin,
Lets appreciate shit, applaude, laugh and start clappin,
Get up on your feet, turn the beat up and start dancin,
Get you'll ladies up and get your body bouncin,
Think about your actions before you take part,
Look for the answer from your brain not your heart,
Let the loving free and let the friendship start,
Working on this together is extreme and hard,
The poetry explained helps me out and stress free,
Relax, have some Henni, weed and be happy,
Look for the spirit inside your soul and try and help me,
Make the suffering less and help become more easy,
Make life beautiful, worry free and breezy,
Everyone can imagin a simpler and better place
No worry for your religion or colour of your face,
Imagin no descrimination of everyones race,
If only that life style could be more but just a taste,
We would easily freeroll down the highway of heaven,
Not worrying about your job twenty four seven,
Becoming more aware, a priest or a reverend.
Just Imagin
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Old 12-28-03, 03:09 PM   #2
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YOU GOT OBVIOUS SKILL BUT LACK COMPLEXITY AND HARD WORDPLAY.....YOU GOT IDEAS VERY AUTHENTIC AND MIND TEASING ....I DO LIKE THIS BUT I HAVE TO GIVE SOME FEEDBACK TO BUILD ON PERSONALLY I UP THIS CAUSE I THINK ITS WORTH BEING NOTICED
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Old 12-28-03, 04:41 PM   #3
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I agree with Word~Perfect... It's a nice piece, good concept... trying to cool out the ignorance in the Rap game a little... but it isn't as intense as it could of been... it was really basic in structure. And you also may want to check some of your Grammar.

And as a side note: Ain't nothing conscious about Drinking Hennessey and Smoking Weed... To each their own... but for me it kinda contradicts the message some and was just not necessary. One of the main problems in Hip-Hop today is misuse of alcohol and drugs (especially when used together) and the aftermath that can come from people who are under the influence of them.

Just My Two Cents... Liked it though in general... KEEP Elevating!
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Old 12-28-03, 05:52 PM   #4
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well i thought it sounded a bit poetic...i agree work on complexity...up the scheme...some nice internals n multis....jus keep at it.....not bad overall..potential there...jus build.....pZ
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Old 12-28-03, 07:25 PM   #5
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This was cool. I enjoyed it, a fast read. Keep working on wordplay. I think you could make up some real complex stuff.
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Old 12-28-03, 07:44 PM   #6
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You need to leave 3 links or 3 names of people you left feedback to or this will get closed, Thanks.
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