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4Fifth

We ions passed abrassive n beyond thee imagination/ Ur futures in my hand, so i ball my fist 2 beat on n bash ur face in// If u bananas,then im ape-shit,face it only way u'd spit dope is if u smoked crack den barfed/ my whole fam got heart,when our cold trks embark it 'll have cats sportin coats, hats n scarfs// shit could'nt get anymo morbid when ya world gets absorbed by da 4fifth../ till postmortum n rigamortis begins 2 force in2 ya dormant corpse dats stiffer den a 4by4 board is// 45 n bio'll have u fuct up smothered n captured like saddam was 4 fuckin wita motherless bastid/ i'd end ur life n then race ya 2da gates of hell n bet i get back 1st// 4five IJL bio-hazard murda bredrens within a 3rd ofa second in permanesance/ my verbal presance be havin feminine mc moanin like herbal essance// test yet u have everythin 2 lose n ya death 2b gained.. anotha torched/ the only skeleton i've kept in my closet was the remains of ya mother's corpse// im moshin thru all comp like a stompin bull, all u obsticals get slaughtered/ few or more docs said.. kids lost it.a true form of a nimphskitzophsycotical poor kid wit the worst neurological disorder// "i'll kill myself for u.... i'll kill u for myself" -Pantera

Bio*Chemist

True Elements me and the 4Fifth are legends..
Check our lyrics it's evidence,..The way we
send Punishment to our victims.. and obliterate
supernatural emps..Since Cain and Able..We've
exploited with writtens,.. forming a deadly alliance...
Cruel attentions..Leaving Emcee's with a broken
wrist clinging on Precipice..Spitting with Sporadic
Spectrums our liqiuds hit in every direction..Breakin
Darkness..They call us Insane Joker Lyrics..because
we stay coming with wild cards,. and Decking any
apponent with our crazy Bars..We've been called
Clowns with no sense of humor..because we
stay making inviduals Loosers..Intelligence of
a Bio*Chemist..Droping science..Mind absorbed
with Quantum Physics ..So you know I stay..
subtracting emcees with advanced Mathematics..
Check the instruments as my Chemistry mixed with
4Fifth makes use break enemies Apparatus...My
rivals call me a Pimp in the Ring..The way I
stay Slap Boxing..




Critique Please..

Whoa almost fell...at the buttom...

Uppin....critique you lazy bums....

Laters...

i liked it, good flow stucture and wordplay, overall i would say it is one of teh better mics i read.keep it up

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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=101969

4 fithcame hard as hell his structure lacked by site standards but i liked myself and the words usage was agressive yet impressive
i enjoyed the verse as a whole.

struct also lacked minorly but lyrics did not a lil soft but at the same time very raw in delivery imadry and floetics.

over all this wasnt theillest but both lyricist were most impressive and complimentory to one another
a good track

Sweet. Good flow all around. Some of your lyrics seemed to come out of nowhere, but not in a bad way. Could be a rising star here.

Liked it, but don't put it in parapragh form like that. Makes it hard to read. There is real talent here though. Keep up.

Seperate the lines in first verse.
Combustion of vocab n witty lines..
Came toghether quite nicely..
Ok drop.

i like the first dudes verse better, he had nice multies and a good delivery, on the other hand, the other one had a good flow and a good structure 2 make up for spitter1..so overall combined, this was pritty nice..8.5/10

Much appreciated......

Uppin

both had some ok parts in thier verse...but both lacked abit.....4, had a niuce way with words..but lost me in places with the structure....and i dont mean cos its in paragraph.....bio....thought your lines fell short a bit and abrupt in places... also you didnt show the vocab as much....but on the whole as a collab it was ok...nuthin special but nuthin shit....pZ

ure structure 'did' lack a lil, but the flow were still there. Complexity had some blanks here an there, sortta got lost in it a bit.......but overall, i liked reading it....

feedback!
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=102059

Yeah I kinda did Lack vocab....
which I usually don't lack...

Ty for critique...

Laters...

tthe first verse was hot as fuck nice work

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I liked this though i agree that the structure was off and certain parts could have had a bit stronger vocab. Overall, this was a good read, nice piece of work you guys. Keep writing.

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