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Old 12-30-03, 12:08 PM   #1
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Question todays world

IP: 8622 C810

what's going on in society?
nobody is helping my community
people dying,family crying
Is so sad to see lives flying
We got people hating,descriminating
12,13,14 year olds dating
Something is wrong that's all ppl are saying
Everyone is just blaming
Whatever happened to equality
Suddenly we r becoming a minority
U called this humanity?
Kids turn to drugs like u and me
Trying to own respect trying to be somebody
Trying to fit in not pleasing their family
Suddenly no one is happy
People are sad and feeling crappy
Is the feeling we r getting
Where the governemnt is forgetting
To fight for us but they aint ready
For the battle that we r setting
But no one stands up for us
were alone and no one can trust
The streets is a must
Is where we can get away from all the fuzz
So next time don't ask
y we have to hide behind the street mask
Being in a gang is not just fun is a task
There is much more,get the straight facts
If u aren't hating on us then relax
I suggest u get away from da streets fast
Because out here ur not gonna last
Everyday sumone gets blast
And u dying is gonna be the past.
We have come to see reality
that u can only change who ur gonna be
but this is not aloud in society
so imma just start loving me for me.
We grew up on these streets
And were gonna die repping peace.
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Old 12-30-03, 01:20 PM   #2
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hmmm well this seemed to be a dragging piece, stuff just being repeated over and over, not different from many others who do this topic. try to bring something new to it, make it interesting. bring up your vocab. your rhyme scheme can also change from poem to poem. dont be afraid to use your imangination and true feelings!

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