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Old 12-30-03, 03:56 PM   #1
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Life Styles

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Are Life Styles Your Lords Way To Remember and Lable You
Lies Breath To Me and I Was Taunted And Tortured By Fables Who
Laugh At You When You Put Your Life In Faithless Truth
Life Styles Are Aimed To Beings Who Use Hatred As
A Way To Blame and Capture Pain That Exclaims The Past
Lifestyles, Lifestyles, Mere Lifestyles Create a Man

If My Life Styles Are Captured In Lords Wishes And Such
I Will Pray For a New One Followed By Wishing Too Much
I See Crosses and Stars And David and Wonder In Whos Clutch
Does It Belong and Whos Presence Does It Truthfully Belong
Satins Disciple Created The Art Of Preaching Truth Within A Song
Is There a Lifestyle,Which When I Die I Can Learn To Cope With
Or Is Death In Reality Another Lifetime To Many Is Labled Hopless
I am Trapped In Somebodies Foolish Conscience Which Is Failing
Blood Shed Dreaping From Monsters Are Increasing and Trailing
I Exclaim To Many "Fuck The World" Because I Was Ambushed
By The Hauntings Of Gods Anger Trigger By The Way Man Looks
If a Moment That Nobody Remembered Was Embraced To Some1
There Would Be Less Places For a Mad Student 2 Buy a Gun From
Lifestyles r Gods Weapon Of Torture Who r Known as Grown Magots
Hurt The Scorture Of The Heat That Is Brought From Your Own Status

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If One May Escape Reality That Is Brought By a Way Of Life
Lost Souls Are To Be Clensed From Their Stains From Fights
Prayers Answered No Only Bring Pain Like The Pain From Knives
If Somebodies Spirit Is Held By A Labyrinth Whos Walls Crumble
It Will B Like a Paralyzed Spine or Understanding Words Mumbled
Time has To Be Taken as The Troubled Angels Pass The Gates
Have a Loud Conversation Wit God Wondering Why 1 Had To Wait
If Necassery I Will Smash The Slates That Read Aloud Religion
Because Nobody Goes By Da Rules That Is Scriptured Within Them
It Is Sad But True, Lifestyles Ruined The Foundation They Run
There R No Signs Of Hope Or Anything Good Like Strayed Thumbs*
People Used To Pray To There Lord But No Nothing Matters
People Used 2 Rais A Glass For Cheers But Glasses R All Shattered
Mortals Scatter For a New Emperor But are Lossed In There Work
Ones Foolishness Is Incredible, Bizzare, Akward and Bisurk
A Lost Scripture Known As A Torah Was Burned Next To The Bible
All Da Clay Tablets Were Stripped From All The Info That Was Vital

Chorus

Help is Needed, Cuz Souls are Needed To Be Saved Cuz Of Curses
Work Was a Regular Custom But Now Effort Seems So Worthless
Smiles Arent Drawn Permanantly Like Every Man Turned To Stone
Every Person Alive Has Become a Weakling and is Injury Prone
Newborns are Brought Into This World Scared and as They Grow
It Grows With Them Until The New Generation are Now All Psychos
Lifestyles Killed Us And The Facts Are Now Brought To The Curious
If U Take This Serious You Will Be Moved and Touched Not Furious


-Uno
*Strayed Thumbs=You Cant Put a Thumb Up To Signal Somethins Good

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Old 12-30-03, 03:58 PM   #2
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impressive work from a fellow crookland talent only thing is kill the caps i use to do it as well and got hit for it alot
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Old 12-30-03, 04:03 PM   #3
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Iight W.P, Thanxs For The Reply Dogg....

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Old 12-30-03, 04:32 PM   #4
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yo i liked this drop.....it was tight as hell...the vocab, wordplay, evrything was good...jus lose the caps like WORD said...but other than that it was striat up tight..keep doin ur thang

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Old 12-30-03, 04:43 PM   #5
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Thanxs yall
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Old 12-30-03, 05:00 PM   #6
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..^agree with both of'em..CAPS must go...other than that..your flow was good.your wordplay was on point..your content was nice..overall a descent piece...
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Old 12-30-03, 05:14 PM   #7
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Iight I'll work on the fucking caps...Shit, it was said already and it really has nothing to do with the piece so it doesnt need to be brought up every post lmfao


I'M NOT MAD...thats just annoying

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Old 12-30-03, 05:48 PM   #8
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Upping this
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Old 12-30-03, 06:01 PM   #9
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Word caps is annoying.. Overall this piece was good.. Flow was good and lyrically it was above average.. Multi's were nice throughout and I liked the fact that this drop was on some real knowledge shit.. Keep at it kiddo.. Peace

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Old 12-30-03, 07:35 PM   #10
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THanks Up
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Old 12-30-03, 08:43 PM   #11
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good piece man...it's good that u understand that most emotional pieces require good vocabulary which you clearly showed here. Excellent expressing of your thoughts...ill wordplay...and luvin the chorus. I think the chorus was the best part of your piece...gives the reader a clear understanding of what is going to be said which is always a good thing. Overall...good piece.
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Old 12-30-03, 09:09 PM   #12
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thanks
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Old 12-30-03, 10:32 PM   #13
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Old 12-30-03, 11:07 PM   #14
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this piece was the shit. structure and flow were great. good punches. ine of the best i've read today. keep up.
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Old 12-31-03, 12:04 AM   #15
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Structure was nicely put, you had good multis throughout the whole verse, I'm lovin' your grammar and vocabulary. The flow is like Nas's shit, informative and shit, tight rhymes kid, keep up the good shit cuz...
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